Years pass by,
the arrival of truth,
happiness lost,
left in youth.
All I am,
shadows and dust,
standing alone,
I turn to rust.
Empty soul,
tearless eyes,
gazing at the heavens,
I see my disguise.
Horrific thoughts,
they fill my head,
I ask the Lord,
take me instead.
I write this to you,
as I want you to know,
my love is eternal,
now it's my time to go.
A contest entry
- Passing Moments by Naridill.
800 points, ended April 8, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me more! by ASmileForYou.
700 points, ended January 7, 69 entries
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It starts out great and remains flawless.
This is a strong write. I'm glad you entered it.
I especially like "happiness lost, left in youth"
this is so accurate. Thank you. -
awesome
great emotion from ones heart -
wow..
this is amazing..the only suggestion i have is omit the word "is" and make "turns to"...become..i think it sounds better that way..otherwise this is simply amazing..thanx for sharing sis..and best of luck in the contest..
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Gi...awesome poem, as usual...so sad, so filled with love and pain.
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Still penning sad pieces my friend, you do them so well, I hope it helps release the pain. Miss ya, and hope all is well, one can hope.
-Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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