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Wednesday's boat floats around the Northern Quarter

 

 

and the wintering of my soul
becomes sunblind
to the unkindest of snows
- she, my daughter, turns to the woman
I once knew;

can this month of moths
and flashings against the rage
of sun and moon; alike
both pull the tides
that roar into the night
of my veins?

I have grown; blind
to my existing thoughts
of what is left,

yet I journey
on and on
with fading eyes,
aching in those places
where pleasure was once a trip,
and self worth itched like
a whore on Tib Street
on a Saturday night.

They're renovating the Band on the Wall
where cherries were taken
and music lifted the roof
of the Northern Quarter
- in fact
I think Angeline might have borne
there; in the heat of Dillinger's
"I got cocaine, floating around my brain"

A knife, a cork and some other things,
mumble a melody
as the hammer falls,
then the scaffolding strikes a pose.
And I swore I saw Angeline
leaning against the ornate ironworks
to Swann Buildings.

 

It's 3am and the slickblack streets

squirm to the rise of this city

coughing its way

to dawn.

 

 






 

 

 

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  • tara wilson gold member
    April 3, 2008

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    "And I swore I saw Angeline
    leaning against the ornate ironworks
    to Swann Buildings."

    I love this....and I love that part..how you bring her into these for moments...very excellent & a pleasure to read you Gill, as always.....


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    April 3, 2008
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  • Yvette Champ gold member
    April 3, 2008
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  • NoIQ gold member
    April 2, 2008

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    Usually these visions of the night shift and the uneasy movements at 3:00 am of the streets are visions of the world of addiction through the eyes of a witness, but not a participant. However, perhaps because of the cross-over to your muse Angeline and the overt reference to cocaine, this one almost seems to drift through a vision in the first person of addictive suffering. E.g. -- the line "alike / both pull the tides / that roar into the night /of my veins?" The call to veins seems to suggest the addict's need for a fix, and there seems to be a pun on "trip" in "where pleasure was once a trip." Yet those thoughts are written from the perspective of the poet, NOT Angeline. Maybe the shared pain brings that component out -- it's very intriguing whatever the source. And as always, its outstanding verse reflecting all your intelligent resort to imagery and thought.

    • NurseChilly gold member
      April 2, 2008

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      thanks Monte, as always you see through small nuances that I've added in... some of this, is wayyyyy back in time, not the drugs, can honestly say, apart from plenty of weed in the 80's- stayed clear of hard stuff, but the liquour was almost a downfall...

      the mixture of poet/muse/client was a deliberate move which i hope i pulled off???

      thanks luv

      Gilly.x

      - still bending like beckham


      • NoIQ gold member
        April 2, 2008
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        Yes, you pulled it off with excellence.

        • NurseChilly gold member
          April 2, 2008
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          thankie

          the song reference was because the DJ in the Band on the Wall, when it was open, would always play that track for me...

          i used to be quite a little mover

  • Suzanne Dia
    April 2, 2008

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    'coughing its way to dawn'

    I love that line. Sometimes I think Hempstead does that. As if the resident crackheads have impressed their unhealthy lungs on each street..

    But I am so glad that it is finally hump day..



    • NurseChilly gold member
      April 2, 2008
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      i wish it was for me... 3rd one tonight, then one more.... aaaahhhhhhhhhhh

      roll on friday morning!!! ohh yeah

  • Rowan gold member
    April 2, 2008

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    From the first stanza on, this is stunningly beautiful; the quiet ache of moving on; looking back, and the way you look at the world at night. The interplay of what is real, and what is imagined, is simply what makes your work so compelling to read. Ramble? never. This is damn good poetry.


  • misselaineous
    April 2, 2008

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    abssolutelyfantastabloodystic
    This one is wonderful Gill

    i hear the ache, see tib street and know the place and the woman

    elaine


  • Night Hope gold member
    April 1, 2008
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    "and the wintering of my soul"

    Dammmnnn, Gill. From this one sentence onward to the last, just...dammmnnn. Wanda

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