Gallant stares of stationary sadness,
madness crumbles in destiny's short role
as decisions sit wandering despair
locked in disillusion's wonderful stage.
Sunlight peels distortion's pretense,
intense individuality holds
words tearing the emptiness of youth
completing the faith of isolation.
Mind beckons the brilliance of romance,
to dance cerebral passages cascading
metaphoric science like a black hole
throwing up Earth's distilled reality.
I bow before your soft pain and smile
while velvet frowns conduct imagery,
retro knowledge in the glorious now
traveling scenes still guarded by time.
A contest entry
- 000 by individuality.
600 points, ended April 1, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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still wonderful...you're so good.
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Wow. I can tell you one thing.. I am so glad to see that you got Gold for this one.. I really loved the imagery here, and the flow was just great.. well done.
Maeve
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Before I had reached the end of the poem my mind was telling me this was Golden, if not now then soon... This is fantastically good!!! Congratulations!!!
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Entrancing!!
I really like the second stanza.."completing the faith of isolation" That was gooood!
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Most especially well done...
Making me admire a lot here.
Every line a poem in itself.
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Excellent, Iggy, so superb...congrats on the 'Gold' to
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This prolly seems slightly random, but this piece reminds me a bit of Alice and Wonderland...I'm not completely sure why. I very much like the first line of the second stanza, wonderous imagery, and the ending seems like something slightly scifi. But mebbie that's just me. Regardless, you definetly deserved the gold. :3
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A truly amamzing piece, stunning both in language and imagery! So glad you got the gold for this.
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Fantastic imagery, a piece well deserving of the Gold, congratulations.
Bravo
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gorgeous incredible wriye, Congrats
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an ode...this is really stunning...i got a little emotional on this one. totally gripping write of incredibly beautiful language. you amaze me, always. so good. my, my...
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a good piece of poetry, good imagery here which flows along nicely, not the usual hard alliteration, but that is good to slide away sometimes into realms. thank you for entering and good luck.
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