you're alone in the world
you're scared for your life
there's nowhere to hide
in the shallows of the night
you're listening to sounds
that you've never heard before
you're hearing the screams
of strangers and loved ones galore
you whisper to yourself
you wish you weren't here
you know there's nowhere else
since this is your home
living like this just isn't right
knowing there's hurt all around
there's nothing you can do
but hope and pray
pray for this to be over
prayer for a warm,meadow scene
with bright yellow light
and cool green grass
when no one is hurt
and everyone loves
where birds sing cheerfully
and you're living your life
not where shadows lurk
and monster haunt every corner
or even where a bullet
can bring you back to reality
A contest entry
- Give Me the Best of You(show me your soul) by Deadmans Heart.
2000 points, ended May 18, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow.... a short video just playd before my eyes. The imagery is incredible, I could honestly see everything as it unfolded
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thank you for such a lovely comment
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Lots of gritty dark imagery and a good take on the contest theme. Just a spell-check: courner should be corner. Hard-hitting ending, nice write.
Thanks for entering!
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thanks for the comment and the help, will change that in a second here!
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Rhyming seemed inconsistent and forced. The you, you, you're speaking to the read yet this poem does not apply to me. You're also telling and making all the usual mistakes. I don't mean to be rude, I just know you won't improve unless someone tells you the truth.
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um...there is no rhyming and if there is..its just by accident..its a free verse poem
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wow love the last stanza! also i love the picture you painted in the last few stanzas. awesome!
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