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Night - Part I

Let's lie down under the moon and stars,
in the grass, just by the maple tree.
Who cares who sees us lying here,
we're just two teenagers, so let's be free.

The grass feels cool pressed onto my back,
and the night air caresses my skin.
I feel free, like a bird high in the sky,
as my hair blows carelessly in the wind.

Looking into the sky and watching the stars,
I felt so insignificant, just another girl.
But being here with you right now, I feel strong,
like I can face any problem in the world.

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Part 1, there are III parts.

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  • offlimits
    August 11
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    beautiful write it was good way to describe love and night in one
    god bless
    love cassie
  • petycash
    April 11

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    Great

    Well written, something like this was just going through my head before I read this, so that made it even more impressionable. Great write! =]


  • allxthatxIxam
    April 10
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    awesome I love the way you expressed emotion in this poem
    great write!!!

  • Nakatrea
    April 1

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    Well well well . You can write poetry R. ( i really need to give you and AP name hon) This is pretty cool. If i were you i'd take out the word night in the last line of the second stanza. it sounds funny. Other wise AMAZING my friend. *sigh* part two so far is good too but i'll comment on that once its finnished!

    Kat


    • shopaholica
      April 1
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      Thanks! I changed it :)

      What's an "AP" name?? o.0
      and why are you a kat??? o.0
      This whole thing is soo CONFUSING!!! lmao!

      • Nakatrea
        April 2
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        AP name- something i can call you other than your first name.

        I am Kat because it is a shorter version of my user name and i don't want to use my real name...

        Its not confusing don't worry. I'm always here R.

        • shopaholica
          April 2
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          So what's my AP name?
          Shop o.0? Holi? Paho? Opah? Olic? Lica?
          They all sound very strange.....
          LOL
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