My mind is a magician,
with waves of magic thoughts,
casting my spells back on me
in sparks and ticks and noughts.
Inside my magic cloak, a heart
beats wanting to be known.
I feel you come inside a spell...
"We shall never cry alone".
Call forth stellar ladders, climb!
Amongst the stars with you.
Make mosaic liquid oceans
Sky-stride barefoot in all 'Blue'.
No matter what found trickery,
from my magic golden book,
all pales to insignificance
when in your eyes I look.
So I simply drop my cloak to feel
cool whispers in nights air
breathed and winged upon a trust
we'll soon be taken there.
A place beyond my wizardry
embracing loving 'Home'.
Desperation, now airborne and abandoned,
flings us flying, 'not alone'.
Author notes
Written as an inspired response to and for, my close friend 'Lucy'
Option 10
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF - Two 4 One Prewrites by apoeticinjustice.
1240 points, ended May 2, 37 entries
Honorable winner
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Welcome any sincere responses.
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How odd ...
this kept bringing up thoughts of Harry Potter.
This is quite an accomplished write. The only thing that I didn't care for is the one inverted line:
when in your eyes I look.
Otherwise, you've succeeded quite well in endowing this with a magical feel that still speaks to us on a very personal level, describing something in words that can't really be adequately described in words at all. It's a love poem without being a love poem, and with a touch of fantasy thrown in. It's a bit like a drink of cool water after being out in the sun too long. -
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Thanks so much ecrivain...
and so good to hear from you!
'when in your eyes I look.' -Hadn't thought about that...
'besides your eyes in which I look' - Might be much better?
I do hope you're keeping well and that perhaps you are writing again.
Sol
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TWO GOLDS! Even better!! 
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awww so sweet, I really like how expressive you are in this piece and I did enjoy the rhyme, flow was nice.
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THANK YOU!
Thanks so much Shattered Shell !!
The pleasure in receiving your 'Gold' will be much shared with the person I wrote this for.
Sol
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This is fantastic!
Such raw, passionate words in there, though the tone is gentle and shy.
It is painful for me to read this at the moment, but that will not stop my appreciation of it. Wonderful work...
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Thank you again for such generous encouragement SilverQuill.
This one apparently means even more to someone very special to me than it does to myself, which makes it mean even more again to me... if that makes logical sense.
Glad you like it
and I'd like to wish you well, friend.
Sol
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YAY! GOLD!X
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Two hearts that share a 'secret' seems written here. An understanding of soul that is beautifully rendered with the words, "breathed and winged upon a trust...a place beyond my wizardry, embracing loving 'Home'..." Magical write, Magician. Peace. Rhonda
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"We shall never cry alone".
That is my favorite line...
This is a very sweet write about friendship and what it means - inspiring in itself I love the metaphor you have carried through out, it's a perfect description.
Congrats on the trophies.
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Much thanks to you Sol
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first of all thanks for the long detailed comment, sorry you wont get one back like that lol as i am in the middle of watching snooker - it is on the interval now
good imagery with the magician, it is a good mixture to throw magical sparks into poetry's spellbinding ways, nicely written
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what a terrific write this is, I enjoyed each and every line. It flowed wonderfully as well. Excellent.
Rory
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Thank you very much Rory.
This one holds a special spot for me, as it was written for a good close friend of mine. I'm very pleased that you like it. Sol
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This is very nice.
I like it better than the ship one. The language is still "not quite English", but it's fine anyway. Being poetry helps in that respect. Poetic license allows for a lot of leeway in writing poetry. On this site, few know the difference anyway.
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Much thanks to you ecrivain, for indulging me with your eye.
I'm glad you like this one, as I do have a particular fondness for it.
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck, Josie
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This was so beautifully written, and it flowed so perfectly. I love the imagery and mystical thoughts in this. Loved these lines
"Call forth stellar ladders, climb!
Amongst the stars with you.
Make mosaic liquid oceans
Sky-stride barefoot in all 'Blue'"
Excellent write! thanks for entering & best of luck
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You never cease to amaze me. I'd give anything to be as poetic as you. [How do I put my lil clapping characters in?!!]
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Very good, unusual in my eyes but quite the write
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I can't say much that has not already been said, so will just agree with it all. Not only was the flow excellent, but the vocabulary used is impeccable. I wish you the very best,
reenie
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Call forth stellar ladders, climb!
Amongst the stars with you.
Make mosaic liquid oceans
Sky-stride barefoot in all 'Blue'.
I love this soooo much.
I must have read this poem over 20 times already (more I think). It still leaves me speechless and breathless and heart skipping a beat (or 4 or 5).
Words cannot explain how brilliant I think it is - or shall I say you are for being the mind it came from!
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I'm so glad for you to have inspired it out of me...
It's just won a 'GOLD'!
XXX
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This is wonderfully written, flows beautifully and contains stunning imagery!
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This was so amazing I am in shock.. The flow of the words was beyond words really. and the image that you have created with your words is just beautiful.. I loved this piece.. the emotion in it was so heartfelt it brought tears to my eyes..
I wish you luck in this contest.. It was such s strong piece I'm sure you will get something for it!!
Great and beautiful write..
Peace to you, Jetleena
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Simply divine! Your poetry flows seamlessly leaving the readers eyes to feast on the fullness of your creativity that is carried gracefully across the page here. Thank you for sharing your words with me and best wishes to you in all of your endeavors. Keep that quill dipped in ink and ever ready for use dear poet.
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A feast of a poem to enjoy!
So tightly written, yet so flowing, and understood.
I really enjoyed your poem wisely written, and a true
feast to the soul! My favorite part was:
Call forth stellar ladders, climb!
Amongst the stars with you.
Make mosaic liquid oceans
Sky-stride barefoot in all 'Blue'.
FEAST of a very well written POEM!
ears/Seattle.
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Good Poem
Very active and moving. Very original.
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What words of inspiration you write here for a friend. Liked the flow, the rhythm and rhyme of these lines - liked the alliteration and verbiage used as well. Easy to read and understand the words used - enjoyed the read.
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This is such an amazing poem and such a wonderful tribute to your friend, well done. I loved the imagery you used throughout the poem, great write and all the best for the contest.
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Very kind of you Vanessa, much appreciated, so much thanks to you. Sol
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Love it still.
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My favourite poem in the whole world.
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No response could be more encouraging than that! Bless you X
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You weave a spell like Merlin and mystical images come forth...
now I'm humming Nina Simone's "I put a spell on you" lolol ... the clients are looking at me like I'm mad and two of the ladies are singing along too... tis all good
this is what working nights does to me, sends me round the hat-rack with the magician's spells whirling around and around
very nice Sol... good luck in the contest too
G.x
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Thanks so much for your great support and encouragement 'N.(ot)Chilly' X
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