Brian saw Carol standing at a bar.
Carol was looking fit tonight. Brown hair falling down to mid waist.
Brian stood back in a calm lust. Carol was stunning.
Walking towards Carol, Brian thought of all situations that may unfold.
Knowing that tonight, would finish most unusually.
Brian put a kiss on an outlandishly soft pair of lips.
Long did it last.
Parting, both softly panting, no words said.
A soft 'follow' and Carol was away.
Brian was on follow, watching and lusting.
Sway; oh how it sways.
In a lift, and with a kiss, passion did unfold.
Carol didn't know it at first. A soft click was all.
Carol stood back, and saw truth. Blood trickling down.
Slowly falling, a distraught look.
Brian, crying, put his gun away.
Third Floor. Brian walks out.
Author notes
This contest, this "no E" thing. It's hard man. I took the E off my keyboard and must have pressed the 'air' a dozen times.
This poem is sort of inspired by a scene in Sin City.
A contest entry
- No E's Please! by aaaaaaaa.
460 points, ended April 2, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is so brilliant! The only bit I wasn't sure of was the word "distraught". Didn't quite fit for me. But I do love the whole concept of this.
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haha yes! it totally reminded me of sin city before I even read the authors notes. well done, gl in contest.
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PS:
I called it An Elevator cause, after writing with no E's for so long, I longed for one.
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