hands shake facing up
with weight of a small baby,
self gesture of want
Author notes
general
I'm diffident not confident with good luck; Isaiah 65:11
please comment with essentials
not unnatural emoticons NOR the applause at all, thank you
A contest entry
- Traditional Haiku (5/7/5) Optional themes by piccola.
600 points, ended April 2, 2008, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
gently
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Oh my, sad
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yeah, but expression was relievingingly uplifting
crazymomma I'm glad you came back
yes... I was longing for a wee one manifested, not miscarried -- so I articulated with silent hands to not cry and this was the satisfactory communication in the ending.
and of course, there is a heightened match unexpected from the judge.
it shall stay on poems I'm focused on,
babies are my subject
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At first I saw a parent holding thier child, then a child trying to get attention. I know I am way off base here. I think maybe I will keep reading til I get it lol!
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haha sure
crazymomma thank you for smiling with a glimpse
interesting language you gave the signal, with your second wonder especially. let me know if you'd like me to depuzzle it to my full personal write, but I like your opening it.
nice visit,
babies are my subject
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i can see why you won gold with this beauty
well done
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a look to be liked
raggyann ah we can be classy as grassy...
thank you so much for scanning my poems I'm keeping a focus on, this one does reverberate so as to not be put away by me and I'm glad you didn't simply click out. it does have fuel for feeling --
I guess you missed author notes with my not wanting to be crowded with spilled splash of applause symbol, but I appreciate you touching my page with regulating words.
return favor routes an interest,
babies are my subject
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Wowza ! you penned something to marvel at.
cograts on gold well deserved!!!
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I don't know why, but this reminds me of years ago when I awakened to the sound of sobbing and my husband was standing at my bedside holding our dead infant in his hands. His palms faced up and he was trembling; maybe that's why. Thank you for using all lower case and thank you for entering
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superimposed...
abear I brightly see your flower avatar and soft message
tremulous am I to say I am honored, but I appreciate the scope the sharing this could serve. for me it was emptiness after miscarriage, but there is the foundational uplifting of knowing our cries heard, as we would a child.
cherishingly I'm sorry for your story,
babies are my subject
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great write!
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