iron in spun napkin stack's even span-
spinal framework, halfway to spill
meandering twist on a geisha's delicate fan.
axis of minimal taste, part of a plan
forest ranks rise, emboldened by will
iron in spun napkin stack's even span.
alluvial pondering on the fall of man-
gray harmony frozen so still
meandering twist on a geisha's delicate fan.
skeletal diving, in aged dripping pan
shadowed expansion, of a porcupine's quill
iron in spun napkin stack's even span.
shards of lead fabricated, and spun better than
heart's bent and repaired in time's mill
meandering twist on a geisha's delicate fan.
moving forwards to where it all began-
forgotten smashed fingers bruised to chill,
iron in spun napkin stack's even span
meandering twist on a geisha's delicate fan.
Author notes
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Villanelle:
A Villanelle is a nineteen-line poem consisting of a very specific rhyming scheme:
aba aba aba aba aba abaa.
The first and the third lines in the first stanza are
repeated in alternating order throughout the
poem, and appear together in the last couplet (last two lines).
*Edited to remove "big words" that may distract, take away or remove meaning from the piece. I hope this suits.*
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- Celebration Time - Invite Only by Laura Lamarca.
1750 points, ended April 2, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Hetha
Beautiful write I haven't done this form yet. Just did my first sonnet though. Your poem was very well written think it should of got in my opinion a high ranking trophy lol Congrats on the greenie though
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Great poem. Such discipline to form. I am such a chaotic writer I love reading your great pieces.
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Perfection.....I'm am just speechless! You have done very well, and well done on your honorable mention..
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a fantastic poem iron in spun napkin stacks even span meandering twist on a geishas delicate fan congratulations on your shiny and thank you for sharing your poenm with the group
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this form is very difficult for me ... then there is your vocabulary; it is very impressive and I'm sure for you it is nothing at all to understand, but for a simpleton like me I just wander aimlessly among words ... a nomad lost in the desert. Still, never let that discourage you or hold back...Instead keep posting and it will encourage all of us to expand our vocabularies!
Thank you for sharing with us.
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Very interesting. I think Villanelles are hard to work with. The fifth stanza seemed to work the best and make the most sense, but I was kind of lost among the rest of the poem. Your vocabulary is very extensive but I think it overpowers the poem's story/message. Thanks for sharing this with the group.
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