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A Killer's Ecstasy

I look into her eyes and they tell me its ok

She wants me just as badly as I want her

So with her hair in my hand and my

Knife at her throat I make love to the tramp

With soft sensual whispers…

“The sound of your skin ripping,

From my erotic dull blades

Gives me such unexplainable pleasure.

Can you feel It as much as me”

Each tiny rip sends tingles down my spine

She is the best I ever had!

I slash her breast, stomach and thighs,

Consuming the sweet red wine

Slowing escaping her wounds

Never have I felt this much pleasure

Surely this is a killers ecstasy.

My heart is beating faster…

I’m slowly losing control

I have to move faster or she’ll

Think that I’m not good enough

“Ohhh….my sweet, sweet darling

It’s time to play a game,

I doubt you ever played before

I made it up myself,

Its called “A Killers Ecstasy”

So relax and enjoy the show”

Slowly, and deliberately I start

To remove all my clothes

With every piece of cloth that falls

Her skin rips open too

The look of horror upon her face

Makes it that more special

As I reach the final cloth

Its time for the grand finale

I slice her throat from

Side to side and boy is

It a treat, to see her eyes go

Completely blank I know

That she’ll never forget me.

Author notes

Wearychild

This is my first poem about an erotic serial killer. I hope you all enjoy it.

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  • TyrannyForestFairy
    July 15, 2008

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    ohhh wow this is bloody brilliant, I must admit for a first timer on a theme like this. 'I slash her breast, stomach and thighs, Consuming the sweet red wine', my favourite lines. Great job!!


    ~Emily~ xx


  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    May 18, 2008

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    This had potential... It really did, but it all went out the window with your poor grammar in the first line. It was just too big of a mistake to get past.

    Other than that, though, erotic serial killer poetry is a neat idea. I wrote one myself, called Kiss of Death. It's a lot more graphic than yours, but I would highly recommend you check it out if you can handle that sort of thing.

    Thank you for your entry, and good luck.

    Laura

  • depressedangelchick
    May 15, 2008

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    i liked it and it is definietly dark and twisted. idc that its late ot comment on it but i just read it andi think its good


  • SuicidalLover
    April 16, 2008

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    Now shit is dark and twisted! To get into a killer's mind like that...scary. Thanks for entering and for following the rules!

  • William T. Masonis
    April 12, 2008

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    Very nice, flowed well

    Smooth. Liked it centered that way. Glad you liked my recent submission; I'd had that one sitting around for quite some time and didn't know what to do with it; thanks to your contest, it now has a home.
    Back to your "Killer" piece: Nicely coherent, beginning and ending with the eyes as it does. One thing; you might want to go back and add "much" to the line about it being more special; without it you lose some rhythm. Regards, Bill Masonis


  • daydreamerz43
    April 11, 2008

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    Wow

    This feels weird saying, but this was kinda hot, lol. Great poem, very "edge of your seat" kind of thing


  • LadyDementia gold member
    April 5, 2008

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    Wow gripping piece, you have really pushed the boat out here. Short but straight to it and twisted tot he max. ll the best in the contest with it


  • ArchOblivion
    April 1, 2008

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    O_O!!

    Whoa this had me on the edge of my seat!! really good, like whoa I don't even know what to say! The ending was just wow "To see her eyes go completely blank I know that she'll never forget me" Chilling!


  • Disturbedmess silver member
    April 1, 2008
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    wow........thats all i can say....is wow.....awesome work....good luck


  • Synthetic-Nightmare
    April 1, 2008

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    WHOA.....

    Now THIS is fuckin hot as hell.....

    Holy shit, i'd fuck THIS killer in a heartbeat
    This is hot:

    "So with her hair in my hand and my

    Knife at her throat I make love to the tramp

    With soft sensual whispers…"

    Fuckin amazing poem, and EXACTLY what i was looking for. You did very well, wanna know what's fuckin scary??
    I have dreams about this type of situation constantly....ever since i was a child. haha
    thanks so much for your entry and kudos

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