Unzipping my involuntary
conscience a stubborn
orgasm gasps
in stubborn
frenzy
My loosend
will cracks,
as I descend
in immortal pleasure.
Quivering,
your temptation
releases my
wantoness
which explodes
in unruly colours
Soft sensual
seduction creeps
to explore my lions
that labour intently
in fruitless effort to
resist.
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt Adult Sensual by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended April 1, 2008, 10 entries
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Comments
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A very sensual read, just two minor points - you repeat stubborn twice in the first stanza, perhaps an alternative for one of them? In the final stanza you have written 'lions' rather than 'loins' it just tends to jar the mental image somewhat but otherwise it was great, just enough to make it sensual without going too far. well done
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A beautiful sensual write with just a hint of erotica.
An enjoyable read.
All the best Sue
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Very sensual on the edge of erotic...lovely metaphor and flow...nicely done...
thank you for sharing!
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