Sympathy balanced on needles;
caressing the fringes of
malignity,
reflecting herself in
dirt.
Author notes
Time: 15 minutes
Count: 13 words
Prompt:: "When angels fall"
[who said angels were good?]
A contest entry
- Short Poem Frenzy! by ShadowsMidnightRose.
1050 points, ended April 16, 2008, 71 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrite Mania 3 by Celticmoon.
800 points, ended May 27, 2008, 49 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Now you tell me:
Comments
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the first three are absolutely killer ! immediately captivating. so powerful in only five lines. your take on the prompt was brilliant. i never would have come up with something as imaginative as this. i adore it <3 excellent job on the trophies, though i think you should have received something better ! best of luck in the contest !
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Like this a lot. Short, but says a lot. Best of luck in future contests with this piece and congrats on the trophies it has netted to this point.
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I really like this. Especially the first few lines, they capture so much. It makes me think of people showing support for someone, but their sympathy dances on the edge of a pin, because there is something malicious under the surface. Like they're about to turn on her. Nice. I also like "reflecting herself in dirt." I am not sure whether she is dirt in 'their' eyes or her own, but it's a powerful turn of phrase.
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And why should that reflection be so muddy? Great poem, as always your words are perfect.
♥
whisper
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reflections aren't real
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Do you know what helps me keep just a bit of sanity? Sometimes the reflection is real. and that is great moment.
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Take refuge in knowing you're good enough .. not a reflection. And an earlier comment of yours ... you don't fail as long as you try again. And that's what you're doing.
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For such a short write you instantly grabbed me with your first line. The imagery is orginal and I love that. Stepping out of the box is something I truly enjoy reading in poetry esepcially in my contests. Bravo! Thank you for entering. Best of luck to you.
Blessings
Bel
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This was really a unique take on just from the title alone, yet the over-sensibility of it all really stills up on the affectivity of the human mind
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Thank you for entering my short poems contest. This poem is very hard for me to understand and I am afraid that its abstractness is lost on me. But I have been know not to be able to see the forest because the trees were in my way.
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You have a way of bringing to mind the things that other poets can't. reflection in dirt? niceeeee
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Such a beautiful take with the prompt.You used the 13 words wonderfully. I enjoyed this very much. good luck in this contest.
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Wow this is very descriptive and is just beautiful.....all I can say is welcome to the finalists list.
Thank you for entering my contest, good luck! -
WONDERFULLY WRITTEN
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I see you are back with these short wonderfully written pieces (though in reality they never went away).
that ending was just fangtastic
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I choose my contests wisely
I only enter contests from people on my favourites, or those I know - because I know they won't be biased ... quickies in particular because I won't get an overly happy or bizarre prompt.
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I love the first line. Its realy creative!
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the last bit reminds me of part of a story I recently wrote. Reflections in dirt.. I like it a lot, whether my story was similar or not x
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lol
the name sounds familiar
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Wow. This is a very intriguing piece of thought penned in so few words. Excellent take on the chosen prompt! Great rite!
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Thank you
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I tell you this is good. Very interesting vocabulary, fellow Indian.
Not all angels are good... 
ooh, nice. Such a lovely piece. Good luck in the contest.
- namita
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lol, ask my mom - there's hardly anything 'indian' in me
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Well isn't this just a damn punch in the face.
That last line leaves me gasping and it's brilliant!
Thank you
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I needed the punch, lol - I've been trying to write with wit and all I got was sappy my-heart-is-broken shit. I may post, I dont know
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