I came to your garden,
my eyes gently closed,
with the scent of springtime
my senses aroused.
Walking next to you
and holding your hand
another smell comes to me,
the freshness of wet furrowed land.
Your sudden, warm and gentle hug
kept me safe like in the nest
my nose tucked into your neck,
heart talking to heart, the port of your chest.
In the smile of your eyes
I see violets, colors from the skies
where flowers tied with our love
make a golden rainbow,
a wreath of hyacinth and shining daffodils.
Author notes
Credit:
Divine Union by Montserrat
http://www.thesacredfeminine.com/goddess/divine.html
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A contest entry
- . by individuality.
380 points, ended April 3, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is too beautiful. I'd say- divine poetry! The last stanza is simply too amazing... so simple, elegant and excellent... beautiful, Sonja... very...
- namita
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Beautiful
Sonja, this is very nice and loving. I particularly liked "the freshness of wet furrowed land. " as I am partial to that. lol
Jim
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The elegance of this piece radiates with a light that quenches the thirst of the pallet with a delicate rain that is just enough. Thank you for sharing your words with me and best wishes to you in all of your endeavors. Keep that quill dipped in ink and ever ready for use dear poet.
♥ Touchof1der -
a good piece of poetry that you have written, a fragrant poem which i always enjoy, i like flowers, i guess i am a sucker for beauty
good luck in my contest.
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A lovely write. Good imagery, flow and tone. Nice rhyme and rhythm. Lovely depth of feeling. Nice descriptives. Nice simile. Good word choice, alliteration and assonance. You paint the picture of love delightfully in this piece. Well penned. Best wishes in the contest.
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Just gorgeous!! Sweet scented, picturesque imagery that flutters in love's abundance Beautifully penned my friend as your heart overflows within every word!
I wish you all the best in the contest
Linda
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Stunning piece of poetry.
this was very well done with unique refreshing phrases. Really enjoyed this thank you for entering my contest
Delila
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hello my dear Sonja,
I've not been here for rather a long time to read friends' poems. I'm glad now I got the chance to read your nice poem here.
Wish you the best.
Shahrzad
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SIMPLY BEAUTIFUL!!!!
Oh what lovely memories reading this brings back to me!
That wonderful smell of fresh turned dirt, the flowers with the morning dew sending their sweet aromas up through the living room window, what sweet memories they are.
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You evoke so many sensations, this is wonderful. I can smell the flowers and the wet earth, and feel his hand in mine. It is a precious moment, thank you for putting it to words. Best of luck in the contest.
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beautiful... wonderful scents & colors...this poem is a summer garden...
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Amazing beautiful imagery here. Wonderful writing. Stunning words. Very beautiful.
Love
Wayne Leon
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So beautiful this is...like a garden of love, a spring of loving! You have such a soft and romantic voice, my friend and this poem once again shows just that. And I love that voice!
~ Nicolette
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