I am the river, the force through the land.
holding you here, in the palm of my hand.
My words are the flow, my voice the thunder,
my rhythm and movement tear you asunder.
Until you can stand the pain no more,
washed up and wasted on my shore.
Then I shall warm you and hold you near,
stare into my eyes you will see no fear.
I will be the strength you need in the night,
the hope and elation, the one true light.
I am your Sun, your reason to grow,
look deep inside and you will know.
I offer you salvation and hold my arms wide,
giving you redemption with no place to hide.
I am the spirit, the force inside the earth,
come hold my hand and prepare for your birth.
I am love and forgive all of your past sin,
come my dear reader, it is time to begin.
Now the sun has risen and I uncover my eyes,
unlock my potential from beneath this disguise.
Author notes
The prompts worked so well together that it had me thinking for ages and started and stopped a million times before posting. I hope that the end product is a good reflection of my journey and my place in the world at the moment. Life Changes and I offer a hand to all those that want to.
Simon
PHOTO CREDIT: MARC ADAMUS
A contest entry
- 10,000 POINT - 8 HOUR - 1st ANNUAL ROADDOG INTERNATIONL BLITZ POETRY CONTEST - 10,000 POINTS - PLEASE FOLKS REMEMBER IT IS APRIL FOOLS DAY by Roaddog Wolf.
475 points, ended April 2, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Whatever you like...
Comments
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Thank you for this wonderful contribution to The Poetic Bandits reading list, and congratulations on the HM, well deserved
~Lilac
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For some reason I imagine Jim Morrison singing/talking this poem. You took me on a journey that I would love to take again.
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That photo is amazing. I want to go there.
Your rhythm and rhyme were right on the money. The flow was great and the couplet at the end WAS very good. It wraps up poem very nicely. I love being out in nature. It's amazing what thought can well up when your taking a hike and really taking the time to look at everything around you. This was beautiful well done
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Beautiful and well written write
and so beautifully presented, the more I read the more I want to read, LISA
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One of the most elegant work I have ever read...I wonder if it is only me, but few parts of the poem worked in a novel direction...quite differing from the theme which makes it overall even more interesting...
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I read this three times and it was beter each time, nice work my friend, much enjoyed.
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Beautifully done! After reading, it gives you a feeling of some nice assurance. Thank you for sharing. It's really Lovely!
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This is lovely. You sound like a true blue friend. That is rare in this world today. Thank you for sharing your poem.
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Lovely picture you used for this write - great flow, rhythm and rhyme as well through these lines. Liked the after thought written in italics too. Congratulations on winning HM in this contest.
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I love reading poems with a consistant meter, as yours has, and I enjoyed the imagery as well. Is this a form of sonnet? Whatever form it is, it's nice!
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Wow... this is an amazing poem... I am surprised it didn't get higher than an honourable mention - which was well deserved! I really like your message and the creativity of your writing... wow...
beautifully done, you've left me near speechless!
Keep writing
Polly
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I think you have unlocked your potential long before you wrote this poem and hopefully(if one poem could twist a persons fate for the better)this poem may open your eyes to you being your own potential because this is a very good write. It is not fate that does or does not smile on your potential, it is your confidence and respect for your own talent and what you do with it that smiles or does not smile on your potential.
You know that this was an April fools contest, posted for fun I hope, I had it brought to my attention that some may take it seriously so I sent everyone a message clearifying the fact that it was just in the context of April foolery but maybe your the one fate has smiled upon here because your poem shined regardless of the parameters for which you wrote it. It is your poem, your talent and your potential and desire that carry you to the places your heart wants to go, not fates.
This is a good poem and it is indicative of your potential, so make use of what you have, because your not short of talent by any means.
thank you for entering and good luck in the contest
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That's a damn fine piece of work and well written.
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Not confidant?? Surely you jest. This is, I feel, one of the most eloquent writes I have read in a long time. Absolutely loved it. Brilliant!
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YAY!! you did so good with this piece brother!!! what can really be said about a beauty just found? There are no words.. I really love the way the flow of the words go very well with the picture.. Brings it to life really..lol.
Great write!!
peace to you, Jetleena
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Thanks J...well it is the hands of fate now and she as you know is one of my worst enemies...lol...maybe today she will smile....but I doubt it...
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What do you mean, Does this work?
This is just beautiful!! It is like you were talking to me! This is wonderful, and the message is just amazing!! There is something in this one, that really spoke to me this morning!
Not many poems "speak" to me the way this one did, my brother. Great job on this one!
Best of luck in this contest!!
and love my brother
Nevermore~
Me
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Thanks Sis I am really not confident with this write but lets see...
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