Trampled roses on the stained pavement
Broken dreams dead on the ground
An aftermath of your destruction
Should've walked away
When I had the chance
Everything I had, blown to dust
Everyone that cared, never came back for me
Dangerously sweet illusions clouding my thoughts
Faith in my soul draining away too quickly
Losing myself in this emotional holocaust
A million broken shards of our memories
Painfully fading away; I keep telling myself
I don't owe you anything, but
I keep giving all I have to you
Your bitter sweet seduction
Coaxing me to a whispered death
Toying & torturing my mind with
Melancholy nights of loneliness
What's the point of giving my heart up
So easily, when all you do is crush it
With your beautiful fingers?
A contest entry
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Comments
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So sad. Beautiful.
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Such a sad write, But its beautiful and so full of emotion, I liked it alot. The ending was truley amazing.
Thanks for entering and good luck
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a beautiful write!
very deep and meaningful
the descritpions swept me off my feet
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Beautiful!
This is very touching. My favorite part:
"Losing myself in this emotional holocaust
A million broken shards of our memories
Painfully fading away; I keep telling myself"
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Wow. Each and every part of this is amazing and should be spotlighted. There's not one thing i like more than the other. That's hard to do.
You've got amazing flow, wonderful vocab.
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great poem it flows very nicely and is very strong
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love the last stanza... and how you perfectly laid all the suffer you got thru... I love it good luck!
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I can relate to this so much and wish I could be more of a comfort and say things get better and I know they do, but I haven't totally reached the end of the tunnel yet, so I shouldn't really say things get better. But they do. Loves
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Such amazing word choice and overall an amazing write. Loved it. Congrats you have made it past the audition round.
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this is really powerful.. those who have experienced this will be crying on your lines..
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wow!
Heartwrenchingly beautiful, one of of the best writes i've read in like forever...good job!
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50/50 for following rules
25/25 for overall poetic ability
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What a lovely, despairing write. Well done. Nice use of imagery. I'd like to see more punctuation to help with the flow of your lines. My favorite stanza is the third, wonderful word choices. Thanks for entering.
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Sad and well conveyed. I almost felt guilty enjoying this read, as if vicariously revelling in the suffering of another.
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This is beautiful... I'm totally feeling this right now and you have seriously made me cry... Wow! Its been a while since something touched my heart like this, and I dont really know what to say...other than thank you for entering! Terrific Write, and I do look forward to reading more of your work
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beautiful poem here. I loved how the sadness is kept throught the whole piece. It is sad how everything slowly drifted away from this person and how all hope eventually goes away.
"Losing myself in this emotional holocaust" is an absolutely brilliant line. I loved how two concepts came together to form such an impactful line. The last line was amazing! Hope you win something in the contest! Such an amazing piece. Good luck!
love,
Aparna
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Good poem..
All the best!
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this is amzeing
i love it
thankyou so much
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