I put my hand into the water
To touch the dream there
Shining on the surface
Beckoning
Glowing in the sunlight
Radiant and beautiful
A world of happiness
A cloud full of love
A promise, dream and legend
Misty and star filled
Its delicate filigree
Fell apart at my touch
Ripples rushed my dream away from me
Its very heart was broken
Torn from my grasp
So I returned to my life
Grateful for its solidity
And more awakened to its charms
Author notes
My first ever AP competition entry. I'm a brand new member of three visits!
A contest entry
- I want your best! anything goes, Also hurry because i hate waiting! by urapns66.
350 points, ended April 1, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
This is my very first AP comp entry and I'm quite shy, so how am I doing?
Comments
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The wonderful images you create here
are as solid as real life and so much more beautiful. The filigree of your dreams, and their fantastic intricacy, comes through clearly.
Well done.
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Hi Scoff
Glad you liked it. It was such a personal poem. Thank you.
Lianonsidhe
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this one i like a lot love the wording and the story image your providing with your words awesome. "A promise, dream and legend Misty and star filled Its delicate filigree Fell apart at my touch" this would definitely have to be my favorite part! good luck
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Hi urapns66
Thanks for the lovely comments. It's a real confidence boost as this is my first outing and I'm a bit shy about my poetry. Thank you.
Lianonsidhe
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hi ya! this's my first time entering AP contest too
. this is a great poem you have here. really no kidding. my favourite is the last 3 lines. best of luck..to both of us 
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Hi Zatil
Thank you for your lovely comments. I wish I knew how to change the font colour though, as it's very hard to see on the dark background! Where is your poetry so I can read it? Thanks again
Lianonsidhe
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