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Dear milkman

Three pints today, please,
a light wind to ease
suffering and pain;
then let fall some rain,
drop, by drop, by drop...
sun to make it stop.

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Again, a poem of the moment - no copy kept.

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  • james119
    June 1, 2008
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    oops

  • james119
    June 1, 2008
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    this would be lovely with a picture

    well done


  • toomysterious
    May 19, 2008
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    A short list of sweet requests, melancholy in its simplicity.


  • Nicolette gold member
    April 3, 2008

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    I've never known a milkman but then, i grew up on a farm and we had a dairy there too.

    There is a lovely nostalgia about this note. Thank you for this entry.

    ~ Nicolette


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      April 3, 2008
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      My pleasure. I had the idea of writing a note for the delivery-man, and then including a wistful half-prayer / half-poem for a few of the other things to make a day good... as though they too could be delivered to my doorstep.

  • grm
    April 2, 2008

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    i was born at a time when milkmen still made their rounds...one of my uncles was a milkman, lol, so i appreciate this write for reasons all my own

    thanks so much for entering


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      April 3, 2008
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      They still do round here - a loud Ford Transit diesel van, at about 5am

      Thank you for your comment.


  • Dalaney gold member
    April 1, 2008
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    :) I'd give you two pints free and a whole lot of sun :) love, lane

  • Bad Bill
    April 1, 2008

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    I like this. It gives an impression of depth, while simultaneously defying logic. Nice one.

    Bill


  • cricketjeff gold member
    April 1, 2008
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    That tickles me, short and sweet. Grinnable

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