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Source of life

You are the rock
in my foundation
of clay.
My true love
before I knew of love.

You are my father,
my friend,
my inspiration.

The source of life
and the definition
of me.

You are my beginning
my middle
and the end.

I have imitated
living freely,
coveted
the power within you.

But your strength
is my strength
and I am
a child again
without you.

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  • fantasysmurf
    April 5, 2008

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    Stunning

    Hey shortyjo. This is a beautiful dedication and I think that you expressed an intimate feeling with heart and soul. Be proud of this!

  • Just4u
    April 1, 2008

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    Great duality here. For the unreligious it can be their relationship to father and for the religious can not only be their birth father but also their spiritual father.

    We draw strength from those we have known
    but we grow through the power of our own actions
    in the applications based, upon those times...

    You walked the road till you go
    Alone I thought for did not know
    That there within my beating chest
    Forever still a piece did rest

    In times of trouble could recall
    to help to build that feeling small
    Till once again that road could meet
    and with new strength, my feet did seek

    Hugs...Eddy


  • Barely Breathing gold member
    April 1, 2008

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    This is such a lovely write. The flow of this was lovely and it was such a pleasure to read. "The source of life and the definition of me". This is such a lovely stanza. Well done.