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Give Me One Reason To Come Back To You


Give me one reason to come back to you
Tell me why I should trust you today
After all that you have put me through
I doubt there will ever be a way

I could never let you back into my life
You have ripped my world apart
You have taken away my pride and joy
Now I don’t know where to start

I fear that if I give you another chance
You’ll take advantage of me once more
You’ll hurt me like you did back then
And take away all that I have worked so hard for

It’s not easy to love someone like you
Because your mind is always out the door
I’ll never know the way that you feel
Or what it is that you are looking for

It always seems like you’re in another world
It’s so hard to reach out and touch your heart
All I ever wanted was for us to be a family
But you always seemed to break us apart

Give me one reason to come back to you
Tell me how you plan to make things up to me
Your old tricks and clever lines won’t save you
They’re not enough to convince me

Tell me why you did the things you did
Why did you have to lie to me through it all?
How can I ever go back to trusting you?
I don’t want to have to take another fall

How do you plan on rebuilding our lives?
What will you do to make me smile again?
Where will this relationship take us?
Will you see it through until the end?

I don’t want to have to cry
I don’t want you to make me feel so low
I want you to give me all of your time
I need a love that is going to grow

I want you to take the time and think about this
And until you are certain of what you want to do
I’ll continue on with my life and dreams
Until you give me one reason to come back to you

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • ciara12
    March 7

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    Thanks for entering my contest but I have a small issue.... You are too many lines over... I asked. For no more than thirty... But other than that it was amazing
    Ciara ann


  • Talitha777
    December 5, 2008
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    wow! very powerful well done, and good luck x


  • Kristine86
    December 5, 2008

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    This is really really good! I can absolutely relate to it and you do a really great job of showing them just how much you don't trust them. I've always been a non-believer in second chances, because I feel that once someone hurts you, they should earn a chance to have your heart again, it can't be handed to them on a silver platter. Good job showing that emotion. I wouldn't change anything. I loved it!


  • neenz
    October 30, 2008
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    This was a very nicely written poem. I could totally identify with your similar dilemma:

    "It’s not easy to love someone like you
    Because your mind is always out the door
    I’ll never know the way that you feel
    Or what it is that you are looking for"

    Thank you for the entry.

    -N


  • Ftw lol
    October 29, 2008

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    Its long and dark like the lyrics to my favorite song. But the version you have sung as stricken me like a sore thumb. GOOD JOB


  • Dragonbabyx3
    October 29, 2008

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    This breaks my heart all over again. It reminds me of feelings long ago past... Tears that I cried, The pain in my heart. There is always an overabundace of tears in the world, and not enough love and happiness to go around. This is a beautiful write hun, although it brings back bad memories, sometimes its good to remember, to keep from making the same mistakes. The rhyme is well place, and The imagery, as I said, brings flashbacks...so in that case, Its good Great write!


  • hotchocolate gold member
    October 28, 2008

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    Ahhh....I love this one as well from you. This is a deep one but a good one! Good luck in the contest


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    October 28, 2008

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    I love this poem this is absolutely brilliant. I can totally relate to this piece.. I've been down this road more times than I would rather remember.. You did a fine job with this.. my opinion on this one however is that you keep it the same.. what matters I believe the most is how the poet sees their work. I think that if you take anything out of this poem, it won't sound the same. I am very leery on doing that. .. but if you insist on doing so instead of removing anything why not move some stanzas around.. they are movable btw.

    the first 6 stanzas I would leave alone.. I would however I would switch stanza 8 and 9.. so 9 would be where 8 is.. and 8 where 9 is.. other than that I wouldn't touch it.

    good luck in the contest

    kat


  • Shenanigans
    October 28, 2008

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    Aww, I love this. The rhyme flowed so well I didn't even notice it...not forced at all. It's so sad, and yet I can feel that glimmer of hope... It's like even with the fear, you want just one reason to try again.... beautiful. I've felt this way a couple times. (And yeah, there's the fear of feeling like that again). I love your descriptions of the situation---wanting to be a family, etc... descriptive enough to make a reader sympathetic, yet vague enough so we can all relate. The only thing I would do different is maybe shorten it a little...I won't DQ it because it's awesome, but I tacked on that last rule because some poems (Like this one) would be stronger if more concise. Like at the end with all the questions... you don't need to have so many in a row... your uncertainty is apparent long before that. I'll check it again before judging if you revise, but either way this is an excellent piece. Best of luck to you in the contest! --Shannon


  • Megan Awesome
    July 6, 2008

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    This is really good. I love the last stanza. This kind of remindes me of my ex and me. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!!!
    Megan


  • poeticweaver gold member
    April 1, 2008

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    Wow,

    I like this brother.. It has that.. "I really believe you're speaking to someone feel to it" You might be for all I know.. But anywhos, It's strong, and it shows how much others can hurt us when we leave our hearts wide open. Much love and light brother.

    -Timothy

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