Time slips away;- through bitter dreams, beyond futile efforts of fettered men throughout history. Marking the moments each one in their place and marching onward and ambling on freely, within the soul of His Majesties benevolent love's serendipitous receptivity;- and gracious embrace. Patiently advancing towards those who would let their bitterness, be free.
For I have come so far through His wisdom and happily now to see. That the true hearts' desire of our Glorious God, the Holy Father, and the one absolute indefatigability that is upheld by Him- for all of His children ... is to bring His children an able freedom and an unequaled and relative and palpable- abiding life filled with goodness and peace, because ultimately the perfect vision of His loving aspiration. For all those who would seek the truer nature of it- in itself.
Is the one generous and honest ... and ever open gesture given in the faithful hope to all as a loving prize in the effort. Yes the one lovesome vision and ever awesome offering of His, that in the end, lays eagerly in the waiting ... and willingly within all of us.
The ever inherent and righteous ability to feel and find;- and share and capture with Him and move to hold up. The true joy and wholesome grace and greater beauty of our life's pride and prime purpose.
The grand opportunity, to come and partake in and rise up and walk boldly in a new innocence together in an unwavering union, and genuine stay of mercy and forgiveness with Him and each other. In a lasting time of true distinction between the kind realities and certain prominence of our needs, in and of ourselves, everyone each in their relevance. That mark the evidence of our finite abilities, and betwixt His simple promise of liberty.
Granted for all in the light of His hope, and perfect love;- and purest sacrifice demonstrated for all of us in the face of His death;- laid down in the free abandon, for our eternal security;- and everlasting serenity.
(~ The Narrow Roads Discerning ~)
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So
true-
and forever
glorious, and
kindred, is this
wondrous and tender
vision of mine. Living
purely and ever openly,
with God;- striving to be
free;-and certain within me
amid the lowly lavender- and
wheat fields;-taken in- and basking
in the luminance of the Sun, supplicating
mid conciliate winds, and maturing in the
light of the affections, of their love for
Him. For so touched I was by their honest
faithfulness. As teeming I tarried to
view them. While I did amble along amid
the swaying stalks so very felicitous- to
be alive, and as an initiation to my Father.
Upon the soul of the day, I offered again
to Him for His promise culminated for me, my
essence. For Alas my spirit cried out aloud with
them as I marveled in the benignity of my Lord for
imparting to me. The liberal blessing of my life
and giving me His eternal assurances;- and for
delivering me;- and returning me to a veracious
and overt:-and amenable position of hope and faith
in Him. Yes for purging and lifting and empowering;-
and molding and maturing me- and indemnifying me in
His certitude, and enduring graciously, the horrid
penalty- of my willful prides contumacy. For ne'er
to trammel the ambling of my committed volition. In
the greater wisdom and grace of their instruction I
willingly did revolt in sheer defiance before His
tender eyes of mercy. Amid the futile campaign,
of my own bitterness. Distinguishing only those
weary days apart from the welcome- and-honest-fervor,
of His embrace, and so through this detachment, and His
patient hands my heart's longing was brought to know
compassion and to be absolvitory. As able today and
thankful to Him to see. Of the many roads I have
peregrinated down. Illuminated upon this narrow
path, of God's allinclusive way.
("It is all I have come to
truly
discern,")
of an aeolian peace. ~
~ Poem Written for You By: ~ James Lee Long ~
Author notes
For Ladame's (( 31st Birthday! ))
For the imitation contest I chose the great poet... ~ "Robert Frost" ~: and the poem: ~ The Road Not Taken ~
Link to rhyming poem... ~ The Giving Trees ~
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2502619
May God continue to bless you with the warmth of His love as well, as the welcome of your heart remains willing and ready, and open, to receive it.
~ James ~
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A contest entry
- . by individuality.
380 points, ended April 3, 9 entries
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Honorable winner
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450 points, ended April 16, 59 entries
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450 points, ended June 3, 21 entries
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350 points, ended July 11, 282 entries
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450 points, ended June 3, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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690 points, ended June 14, 63 entries
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Please tell me what you think [Reward: double points]
Comments
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YIKES, WAYY TO MUCH TO READ!!!!!!
IT LOOKS GREAT, I KINDA SCIMMED IT!
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Interesting homage to Robert Frost as has already been pointed out. A very well written piece in which the strength of faith literally shines through. Congratulations on your trophy and good luck in your other contests. This is a genuinely uplifting piece for some. Thanks for sharing.
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I do not believe in the "richness of god" he has kicked me to many times when I am down thus driving me further into the despair I feel. Thank you for sharing this I am glad you can feel it but I just don't
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Your faith abounds
Jesus; I believe was a little more succinct than your first section with His 'Lord`s Prayer'. Section two;
I believe would have been more effective, had it been in the shape of a cross rather than the commercial fir tree.
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A rather nice write. You expressed yourself quite well, indeed. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done.
. Rewarded 4
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I am a fan of Robert Frost and now of you as well... it was very deep and filled with emotion. Your heart was with this piece and I want to thank you for sharing this beautiful piece and also to say congrats on the wins because you deserved them
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long but very deep i feel you in this and i see myself in this "my own bitterness" "illuiminated upon this anrrow path of gods allinccusive way nice work keep writing and posting nice
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Take s my breath away that this is so well conceived!!!
Genuine mastery of tone and feelings. Now why can't I ever write as well as this?!? 
Hell ova b~day present for anyone!~
Your a finalist in the contest!!!
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wow.
this is really long, but suprisingly, my attention didn't 'fly away' like it would have~
congradulations with the trophies you have won. beautiful music...x
this poem definitely has a heartfelt message if one takes the time to read it right
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Thank you for your entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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kimmyuluv
very inspirational! nice -
Excellent Poem
Your poem spoke to me in a well way it is a well thought out poem i think you had your heart in the write place.
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....Wow.. let me pick up my jaw and find my breath and words you took away with this write!!......This is wonderful.....I can't even explaine why i feel this way which is weird for me I'm usually the person who can't shut up.. but wow!!
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this is an amazing poem. great shape, wonderful content, Well done
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I'm Speechless James Lee
A beautiful poem. I especially like it that you have used such wonderful expressions as: His patient hands; His tender eyes; His embrace and His etrnal assurance. Great job. keep up your good writing and thank you for sharing this with me......Katie
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Great rewrite my friend. I know I have had a few times when I strayed in the wrong direction and then I would feel Him tapping in some way upon my shoulder. Usually by sending someone into my life to lead me back to Hos loving arms. God has blessed me in that way many times. This was very uplifting to read. With God there is ALWAYS hope!!! My one dear friend always reminds me, If I don't feel close to God, He is not the one who moved. You take care. This was very heartfelt.
Bless You,
Sandy
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I just re-read this after looking at your page and it now makes a lot more sense! I really like this, even more now
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I like very much. I find it a little lofty, and I would prefer to read your style, rather than Frost's. Still, very enjoyable and clever.
Thank you very much. Ladame
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There's this quote...
"Never use a big word where a diminitive one will suffice." Lol. But I liked this poem quite a bit. It reminded me of this song by the band Red called Breathe Into Me, and although I'm sure it wasn't intended to be religious, it came off sounding that way, which I thought was pretty cool. -
You are incredible
This gift you have... AMAZING. Are you by chance published ? You have a way of expressing your words like a true poet laureate. Honored to float in your circle. Warmly, Chrissy
P.S.May i make a personal suggestion w/o offending?
I found the colors you chose difficult to read which distracted me until i could adjust, probably just these old lady's eyes though. TX for understanding (in advance) he-hee. Chrissy
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while i did very much enjoy this piece, for it carried a wonderful message, i cannot help but feel a bit of arrogance in it. I don't know why, i don't know where, but i've read it three times and it just reads arrogance to me. I'm sorry, i don't think for a second that it is intended. For some reason, i just pick up that undertone. It may be that it has been posted soooo many times in other contests, but it is a beautiful poem. I'll try reading it another time to see if i still get the same feeling.
Otherwise, despite my anti-christian conontation, i do love this poem. It is beautiful, and i love how you so willingly embrace your dependence of God. It isn't often that people write with their hearts. You have no inhibitions and that is what makes this peom so beautiful.
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wise words and it is indeed a narrow path that leads to God's embrace.
I do love this structure
very creative
an excellent write.
God bless
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Deeply Spiritual
I can appreciate a poet who is willing and courageous enough to bear his soul and express vulnerability and dependence upon God. The poem is brilliant. There are some words I still need to explore to get the full picture but I enjoyed the visual and spiritual aesthetics. Thank you!
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A very beautiful, both visually and content wise, piece of art. The message is clear and wonderfully penned. Well done.
Rory
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Hmmm, this is a good poem no doubt about it. However i think I liked "My Jasper" better. . .good job on a definatley masterfuly written poem.
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i have always admired the word 'peregrinations' you've used in its tense. love the pauses here.
on a personal note, i wish this piece could have been longer. you have wonderful thoughts
thanks for sharing and keep writing.
HENSLEY
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Nicely penned. Compelling distinct, bears re-reading to get more layers. The work flow in poetic form and lets the reader absorb direction along the path. I find the read enjoyable and well worth honorable winnner.
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Days Apart from the Fervor of Gods' Embrace,
and through this detachment, and His Patient Hands
My Heart Was Brought to Know Compassion and To Be
Absolvitory. As Able Today and Thankful to Him to See.
Of the many roads I have peregrinated. Illuminated
Upon this Narrow Path, of Life's all-inclusive
Way, (It is All I Have Come
to truly Discern,)
of
An
Aeolian Peace.
wonderful poem congratulations on your shiny and thank you for sharing your poem with the group
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yeah, this is interesting... some thoughts are blurred though if read in isolation. but then again the whole piece in interesting... no doubt it is a winning piece.
thanks for sharing
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It was interesting... i can't say i understood it but i liked it.
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Wonderful
Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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Hello,
I like the tree image - to my eyes, this is a tree in blossom. hmmmm, as for the content - yes, I keep in mind The Road Not Taken. Is it only my opinion that the poetic persona of your poem has already made a decision long ago? It seems that this persona has been always standing in front of this fruitful tree but that he has realized it only a short while ago. I like the calm tone of the poem and your proccupation with life.
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You are such a wonderfully spiritual writer James. As I have mentioned before I'm not a highly religious person but I am very spiritual and can't help coming back to read more. Each time I am left feeling peaceful as a result of your uplifting, smooth writing style. A great message here. You write from your heart and I love that. Keep writing poet!
. Rewarded 6
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This type of poetry does not speak to me, but I applaud the manner in which it was written. The shape is beautiful. As an English teacher I found that the sentence structure and punctuation were odd (As Able Today and Thankful to Him to See.
Of the many roads I have peregrinated.) Good luck in your contests. Peace, Liz -
The form is pleasing to the eye, and the message soothing to the soul. Bitterness in the face of mercy is futile indeed! Thanks for sharing this piece!
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Im at a loss for words. This truly is a touching poem and its uniqueness is one to be admired.
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Hi James,
Another of your deeply thoughtful and inspiring poems, I see. You’ve done a lovely job with the tree shape, and I like that it gives some imagery to your poem even if it isn’t within the words themselves. As you’ve maybe figured by now, I’m a stickler when it comes to good imagery in poetry. 
I just believe a reader will connect more easily to a poem and its message when combined with concrete pictures to relate to.
There are a lot of things I like about this poem, and really only 1 thing that concerns me even a little. It’s impossible for me to guess what your vocabulary is in normal, everyday speaking, but unless this is truly how you talk on a day to day basis, I’d caution you on using so many uncommon words. Why is “peregrinated” better than “traveled”, for example? Your poem is filled with a lot of abstract ideas already, so the more complicated words you use, the easier you’re going to lose readers. I always loved using a thesaurus when I was in college, but my professors hammered one of the main rules of writing into my head: “Never use a big word when a simpler one will do. “ So, unless you’re looking to avoid repetition, try to keep the big (though admittedly interesting) words to a minimum.
I’m pleasantly surprised that your flow is as good as it is, considering the awkward line breaks in order to achieve your tree shape, so great job on that! I actually found most of your poem easy to understand and relate to, and think you’ve done a beautiful job. Thanks so much for sharing this with me, and good luck in any/all contests you have it in.
Best wishes,
~J.
. Rewarded 8
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Rich blessing of a poem!
What a blessing to read this poem.
well done dearest poet, well done!
ears/Seattle.
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Quite the shape you have created with your words in this poem. Liked the title you chose and the words you have picked - wonderful flow and message shared here.
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This was very beautiful. I loved it a lot. You did an awesome job here, because I'm left speechless. Amazing...wow.
Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest!
. Rewarded 4
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Beautiful formation of the tree! I've been shaping a little also in some of mine, so I can really appreciate this one. The poem itself is obviously densely rich with great sentiment, I think to be congratulated. All runs very well with me... as it's now 4 am with no sleep yet, I'm gonna have to come back for a more deserving appraisal. Which I will do...
Though I can feel it's a great write already!
Sol
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This is beautiful and makes one feel quite serene. We learn patience from the One who has shown patience to us. I love this! It's more than inspirational.
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concrete poems hold a great fascination for me ... what a beautiful image and within it expressing such profound experience concerning God's compassion. thank you.
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AMEN!
Nothing like a little spirituality to cleanse the soul. Fine work.
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Nicely written, this write has a lot to say. Good form and a lot good images from your words, thanks for sharing them and good luck in the contests and congrats on the HM
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Beautiful
Hello and Niaish for sharing this with us here. This is stunning and a labor of love. So beautiful to read this testimony of your love for God. God bless you
Take care,
Sandy
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I love the form! Just beautiful and so uplifting. I so agree you certainly have a way with words. Such a wonderful and amazing write. It truly touched me deeply. Niaish for sharing with me and all. Good luck in the contest a winner for sure
Theresa
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In a word... this is simply fabulous! You really have quite a way with words and know just how to inspire and offer hope. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you in all of your endeavors. Keep that pen handy and ever ready for use dear poet.
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a good piece of poetry that you have written, a good piece though i am not a lover of seeing words capitalised in lines for no real reason good luck in my contest.
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Very good my friend.. This lifted my spirits greatly.. I thank you for that.. I am so glad that I read this.. Beautifully done my friend.. Great write..
Peace to you, Jetleena
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Very Spiritually Inspiring............
to walk with our creator and the different roads and paths we take. WIth God, the roads are always left open so that we may conitinue the path he has paved for so many of us in so many different directions until his coming back. Then the roads will no longer be open for us but to the ones left behind he will still offer up those road for the feww who will find him and accept.....Just another beautiful piece of poetry and the wods flow so smoothly into place !!!~~Toni~~
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Very good job thus far. I hope I come back to read it when you are finished writing it. Good luck in the contest.
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Already an excellent piece James!! I was really taken down that road of knowing, very excellent so far down this road!!
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So far so great, you always weave such wonderful, heartfelt poetry.
Keep those pages turning, I enjoy the reads.
Peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver
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