your voice illuminates this dark place,
and every moment overwhelms my heart.
everything is you,
and you are everything.
one day I will forgive you,
but not today.
A contest entry
- An In-Depth Look Into Relationships by Theactoffailing.
600 points, ended April 1, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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very deep
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aww, this is sad
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sweet! short but well said...
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Surprisingly powerful. For short poetry, though, it takes a lot to impress me. It gives me almost nothing to evaluate, for there is almost nothing to the poem. I picture someone sitting alone on the phone in their room, sad about a girl who kissed someone else. Which is a good topic to start a poem with, but I just don't see how you could actually get me emotionally attached in 6 lines. Good write, and thank you for entering.
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Sad and powerful, I really like it. You have said so much in so few words.
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