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the letter

baby

Can we talk?
So that I can understand this
You took the time to make me
And give me my own name
But I don't remember seeing your face
Or embracing the light of day

Mommy, why didn't you want me?
Was I not the size you wanted?
Did I kick when I should have been still
or moved when I should not have

I hope my brother or my sister
if there is one
Doesn't suffer the same fate
I love you mommy
Tell daddy I'll miss him
And that I was looking forward to all the football games
But you thought otherwise and said
I shouldn't be

So one day
You went to the doctor
And he took care of me

I'll miss the light,
The breathing, the moving around
Since there isn't much room in
a trash can or in the ground

You almost made it
I could've been in your arms
But then you walked away
The day you said "I can't have this child"
And threw it all away

I hope things get better
I hope you regret it forever
Things could've been so much better
I'm sorry Mommy, I wasn't good enough

Signed,
Your Aborted Fetus
 

Author notes

Lowercase Prelude

I wrote this because I am Pro-Life and I want to challenge people and their views on abortion.

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  • movedon
    July 28, 2008

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    Holy....moly..my oh my good lord!!! This is so sad! You did an AMAZING AMAZING AMAZING job with this one! I LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE the ending. I almost cired.

    Warmest,
    Mylee


  • Simply Simple
    June 3, 2008

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    I'm going to cry... This was so heart-breaking. You, my friend, have outdone yourself. This is so true and just... so AMAZING! You expressed and explained everything just to the needed degrees. No more, no less. Amazing... There is nothing more to say. Don't change a word. Good luck in the contests. You deserve gold!


  • xCandieKissesx
    June 2, 2008

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    Amazing Job!!

    What a sad, and emotional piece.. It definately came from the heart because I actually felt like I was in that position. Abortion is such a terrible thing to do to a baby, and I don't even know why anyone would do it. You expressed the pain PERFECTLY! I love how you signed it as the "Aborted Fetus." It was even more compelling than the poem itself.

     

    Thank's for writing such a sad, and painful write. You really showed women the sorrow and agony that's put into abortion! Excellent job and best of luck to you in the contest! =]

     

    + Jackie


  • ForeverLastingComa
    June 2, 2008

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    WOAH! that was A-M-A-Z-I-N-G!! I felt like the aborted fetus was screaming at me!! That is exactly what my heart was telling me. I couldn't bear the fact knowing that I would have been throwing out an innocent child. My favorite lines were,

    "You almost made it
    I could've been in your arms
    But then you walked away
    The day you said "I can't have this child"
    And threw it all away"

    Thank You so much for entering and good luck =D

    ~*ForeverLastingComa aka Leesha*~


  • warrior-eagle
    May 12, 2008

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    ...this is so true
    and so heartbreaking,
    too sad...
    this is done too many times,
    may God Himself have mercy...

    ...Simply Me♥


  • raggyann
    April 1, 2008

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    oh my this is sad
    it hurts to think on this
    i cant say how i feel when a life has been talen away
    you said it with honesty and pain


  • xXxKittieCorpsexXx
    March 31, 2008
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    wow...

    thats really sad... it made me cry... i loved it...

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