I miss the soft touch of your tender lips.
I miss the warm embrace as I hold you in my arms.
I miss my heart that use to be filled with your love.
I miss myself, the happy me, the better me you made.
I miss how our souls touched as I held you in my arms as we talked about who cares what.
I miss all the joy we shared.
I miss the fun.
I miss what we use to be.
I miss the way I felt when I knew you loved me.
I miss your smile.
I miss us!
No more will I be able to share my every thought, hopes, and dreams.
When we met, and I held you in my arms for the first time
it was honestly like the whole world disappeared and only we remained.
That same night we watched the sunrise together and I hadn't done that in forever.
It was such a magical night.
Everything was so great I was sure Cupid had took aim with
his bow and shoot us with an arrow of love.
All I wanted to do was spend each and every moment with you.
I wanted to talk and learn everything about you.
You intrigued me so.
Every fiber of my body honestly tingled at just one thought of you.
I totally yearned for you,
and when I was away from you all I could do is think
when am I gonna get to see you again.
You where like a drug to me, and I was so hooked.
But the years past and we where great for so long,
and I have racked my brain over and over
and I just don't know where it all went wrong.
Now I just don't know where I am going with my life.
I haven't got a clue.
I wish we could go back to those great years but I know we can't.
And I don't know if we will ever capture that feeling of great romance again.
I guess Cupid's love potion wears off with time,
or maybe it just didn't go all the way in.
Maybe Cupid just shot us with a broken arrow.
Something was wrong because the spell is broken,
my marriage is broken,
my heart is broken,
my life is broken!
All because of Cupid's broken arrow.
Author notes
option 5
A contest entry
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Cheers for this lovely entry. Much appriciated for the interest shown in my contest.Love the repetition of the beginning lines that introduce the poem so well. -
beautiful
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'when am I gonna get to see you again.' - I misread that part at first, and thought the 'get' said 'eat'. Heh.
Cupid's broken arrow.. We all need someone to blame sometimes. Nicely done.
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ohhh. so sad. im so sorry that this happened-if it did of course- life can be hell-pardon me- stick in there. your work definatly reflects the pain endured
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So true!
I guess Cupid's love potion wears off with time, or maybe it just didn't go all the way in.
Maybe Cupid just shot us with a broken arrow.
I think I felt like this one too many times...Cupid needs to get his damn act together.....Good job thanks for entering and good luck -
This was a really beautiful write. You expressed your emotions very well, and i can somewhat relate to your words. Thank you for entering
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This is very well written. Congrats on all the trophies they are well deserved. I do have one suggestion though. I would break this up into stanza's it would make it so much easier to read.
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Love it!
Holy popsicles!
It is amazing!
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I don't know if it is because I can relate to it, personally, or if it is because it is so well written, but whatever, I love it!!!! -
I was in this place once in my life so I can relate fully to every thought and emotion written into this piece...
It is a fine sharing; very soul baring
Thank you for being part of this contest -
it had a rawness to it that i liked.
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Aww this was so deeply emotional and I felt your pain as I can relate greatly. Love the idea of "Cupid's broken arrow" -- wonderful descriptions in this as well. Great piece!
Best of luck & thanks for entering
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great work! im not all so sure what to say but that this is an amazing poem! great job and good luck!
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i like the way you repeated i miss
the fourth line: instead of putting slashes through it, why not mmake them new lines?
other then that, this is a beautiful tradagy that you shared with us
I J'adore the last line !
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Wow. This is so good and so full of emotion. I really like it. You've done a good job here. Thank you for entering and good luck!!!
Megan -
Good i liked this alot Very well written and with different emotions. Thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck..
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Shelly -
This was just very typical. It had nice emotion though. Thanks for entering!
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this is realy good but i got impatint and i think its a little to lond -
Great piece, Very well written. The flow was enchanting. Wordplay and construction were spot on. You managed to bring across the emotional atmosphere with artistry. Thanks much for the great read.
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...So...Many...Contests....
Wonderful romantic poem, I love its intricately awkward line breaks to force the reader to conform to its flow. The long lines go against anything I normally write, but I like them non-the-less. Good Luck, yo.
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I really like this poem. Thanks for entering. Shancy.
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this piece was profound and thank you for sharing it with me... if you get a chance read "still life with woodpecker" by tom robbins... mystery , my friend , is what brings us together... reality is what breaks us apart...
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this was really good hun, and it made me cry cuz it reminds me of my life so much.
Every fiber of my body honestly tingled at just one thought
of you.
I totally yearned for you, and when I was away from you all I could do is think when am I gonna get to see you again.
You where like a drug to me, and I was so hooked.
this part was the part that i related to the most. and because i was so addicted to him, it hurt a lot when i lost him. good job!
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Thank you for your well expressed entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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i love all the imagery in this poem! great job! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox
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I, too, saw your heart in this. Very deep and meaningful, though I really wish you would have made a better structure for it. It was pretty haphazard and awkward at times. Also, try to remember to show- not tell. Just a hint
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this was so pretty.
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i saw your heart in this, i believe. wonderful. thank you for entering it!
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Great write. Keep up the good work. Good luck in the contest.
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Awesome work, the flow and construction were so well done. There was ample room for personal perspective and interpretation as a good write should have. Great use of vocabulary and flow scheme. Thanks for the great read.
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I love your referencing cupid's broken arrow- beautiful. I like that I can feel directly how you feel about what you've lost/what you had. Thank you for entering.
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so sad. great poem. Loved this part:
I miss the soft touch of your tender lips
I miss the warm embrace as I hold you in my arms
I miss my heart that use to be filled with your love
I miss myself/ the happy me/ the better me you made
I miss how our souls touched as I held you in my arms and we
talked about who cares what.
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Amazing, the last line did it for me, broke down in tears, lol.
I love it
It's going on my favs!
Much Loveness=]
Emily=D
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thats a long one i like it
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wow - now this is emotion
you almost made me cry - which is a real sign of emotion and expression
i could really relate to this - although my relationship was not this long (but i wish it could have been) - my love for her was
now this is a fantastic write clearly doing what i asked
i loved this the way it was set out and the repetition
well done on this good luck in the contest and thanks for entering
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