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like two birds





behind the old barn we sang
embarking lyrics of robin -
you carried me through edges of
jagged lawn and bark

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • seek
    April 1, 2008
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    thanks so much!


  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    March 31, 2008

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    whoa, truly imaginative and vividly grasping. Loved it!... x Thanks ever so much for sharing this and many blessings to you too. Love and light, Lavender Butterfly.


  • Stonecreek
    March 31, 2008

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    I'm not very partial to the second line, but the other three are pretty darn good. I just wish the first line (which painted a great picture and caught the attention well) could've connected more with the second and continued that imagery.