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I Bleed Tears

I am a woman--
that is all you need to know.
I'm in love with a man--
he's nothing special.
We could be anybody, really.

We met very young
and were friends forever.
Forever doesn't seem as long as it used to be.

Now we're lovers
or a couple
boyfriend, girlfriend
affianced
or however people like to say
that two poeple are crazy about each other.

Take your body.
Go get a knife.
Use it to slash open your chest
pry the flesh apart
prowl through the throbbing muscle
to pull out the beating heart.

Take that heart.
Let all that makes it alive
the blood and rhythm
fade away as you hand it
to someone else.

Finally, soak it in soothing water.

What is love?
Love is the relief as a tsunami
of revival washes through you.

I feel the resurrection of my soul every time he smiles.
He holds that knife when he can't meet my eyes.
But when all is said and done
he puts the beat back again.

Author notes

Hmmm...wanted to focus more on the emotion than background info. This is written from MY perspective...so forgive me if there is not a lot of info about me in it. Love is not about one person, it is about a bond two people...so the less known about a person, the more the emotion shines through in my mind.

The title is relevant. Trust me.

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  • Theactoffailing
    April 1, 2008

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    First, I want to say, the prompt is 1/10 of what I look for in an entry. I just give a guideline and look for the best poetry I can. The beginning of this was absolutely intriguing. I loved it. It was so relatable and the language you used just caught me in the first three stanzas, I was ready to find out where you would take me. Then, you kinda lost me. It just got far too violent in such a random, unnecessary way. It must be your style, but it just caught me off guard, and I think it would do that to a lot of people. I would have stuck with the way you wrote the beginning or at least gave a slight transition to the bloody knife. I enjoyed it nonetheless, and thank you a lot for entering.