you are
he said to me
neither classic nor traditional
neither modern nor romantic
simply inexactly beautiful
what exactly did he mean
i stood before the mirror
and surveyed
her critically
seeking insight into who
she might exactly be
with Ruebens' gentle curves
and Leonardo's quiet smile
the hidden sensuality of Georgia
and Pollock's sense of style
the picture came together
and surprised me
yes indeed
she was inexactly beautiful
and altogether ME
Author notes
Inexactly beautiful...a phrase he gave to me years ago..and now I know what he meant..thank you my friend.
A contest entry
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Comments
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awww!
this is such a sweet and beautiful write! i love the story this poem told, your words spoke so much! everyone is beautiful in a unique way, and you've described the way you are so perfectly... imagery was gorgeous! i'm left in awe by your fourth stanza... it was so creative, inoovative and the rhyme was so good too! flow was great! i like this very much, best of luck in the contests! thanks for this lovely write! 
~beauty of silence
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thank you so much...i look forward to the next round
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aaww
I love the innocence and imagery here. It is sweet when someone like us just the way we are and it makes us feel like someone care for us.
I am not sure what you meant in the fourth stanza but it still was aweosme!! I do hope you stay with this person forever. Good luck in the contest!
loveees,
transit~
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The fourth stanza reflects artists who are known for certain styles or definitions of beauty...Reubens painted full figured nudes...Leonardo DaVinci painted one of the most beautiful smiles (mona lisa), Georgia is Georgia O"keefe known for her use of flowers to depict sexuality and sensual ideals and Pollock is Jackson POllock..abstract artist....smiles
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this is such a sweet piece. short, simple and perfect. beautifully written, and with a great style. i love every single line..and i am glad you finally understoon the last line is brilliant.
i loved this
best of lucks, checkmate
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thank you very much. Its a very personal write.
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This is unique because it is a personal thing between you and him. I'm glad you've finally realized what the phrase meant, that is awesome and I hope it made you feel good.
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wow really sweet poem right here, I don't completely understand the inexactly beautiful term, but I do at the same time!
"neither classic nor traditional
neither modern nor romantic
simply inexactly beautiful"
I suppose it means that you're beautiful in your own way?
Very good write all in all!
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I love this! It is written with grace and style, and an awareness of self that is delicate and Inexactly beautiful!
~S~G~
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Very interesting, indeed women's lives are complicated by the standards set by various men in our society (including Rueben, Leonardo, etc), though you seemed to embrace this rather than challenge it. I would like to see you do the opposite. Lovely read anyways, thanks for entering.
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I liked this - the allusions were effective. However, i said free verse only. Even so, nicely done.
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Wonderful rhyme scheme and flow... such a beautiful story you've made. You have a winner here!
K
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