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Monday: 2am and the Wind whips the Windows



Sat in the office, the radio on low
old tunes fizzle and crackle
the night tries to figure itself
into form and shape; like my mind
has that uncanny way of disappearing
at this time. It is now, I wonder

about you and if by thought and deed
eliminate some shyness
inside me, and say what is really on my mind.


Maybe not, maybe yes

may I,  just not think:
I'll staple all the loose bits
of paper in the clients' notes,
write nonsensical lists of things
not done, not said
and scream silently in my head
that the doctor forgot to sign
the bloody scripts, again!


Night shifts

make me/us/them ramble,
Jenny makes coffee that melts spoons,
Natalia sighs and curses in Polish
with such applomb that I touch
her, paled cheeks and tell her
to take her break.

 

 

We all have ideals

and become lost in penitence;

I have crawled out of the snake-pit

once or twice myself

and seen the river run.

 

The radio reminds me,

that the news is always

a bit gloomier, in the middle

of the night.





 

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  • Saffron gold member
    April 21, 2008

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    “The night tries to figure itself into form and shape”—this line, like so much of this write, reminds me of my own sleepless nights and those times when everything I have ever done wrong in my entire life reruns over and over, or I think about the should-have-dones in my life, while the night still hangs shapeless around me.  I have only worked a few nightshift, and you are right—the news is a bit gloomier in the middle of the night (especially when you have to hear, or read it as in my case, over and over again). 

    I loved this and how I can relate to it, and all the thoughts that the middle of the night brings. 

    Saffron


  • Wandika gold member
    April 4, 2008

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    The feeling established

    A life on hold. Same thing day after day, wishing for that "someday" but and infinite number of days go by and that day has forgotten you. Wishing to take the plunge, worried it won't go well or even close to expectations. Not secure enough to take a chance though the supervisor of what all you surround. Great write.
    Interesting, our doctors left so much paperwork unsigned we would not pay them till they caught it up. Talk about so cursing! I don't miss it at all.

    Jim


    • NurseChilly gold member
      April 4, 2008
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      oohh thank you Jim, your words mean so much

      and psst, the door knob hasn't rusted over yet infact, it's turning well


  • Sprite silver member
    April 2, 2008

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    "The night tries to figure itself into form and shape" is my favorite line because it is so uniquely put. AND I must say that you have caught the feel of the late shift in a hospital (been there myself.) I also love the way you ended it. The entire poem has a feeling of ennui and being a bit detached from "real" life.

    It is so good to be back on the site when I read something like this!

    Joyce


    P.S.I have my mind disappear more often than then, lol.


  • IronIcecream
    April 1, 2008

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    buzzzz
    sleep well it's midnite
    the whispered news
    with dick the wizz

    another static noise
    and then
    the revelation
    arbalest man running naked on the highway
    got arrested

    no one got hurt except the noise
    static at 2.00 or 3.00 AM
    again

    before the low music
    brings back the silence


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    April 1, 2008

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    I used to love working nights. At night the world is different - it loses the polish of day.
    Of course we know I'm not quite right between the eyes either


  • Nicolette gold member
    April 1, 2008

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    I absolutely love your night shift rambling, my friend.... some monday nights are even bluer than the mon-days (i had a blue day yesterday at the office too, lol).

    I hope your Tuesday is pink, Gilly, but if not, just keep writing these ones!

    Great stuff - as always.



    ~ Nicolette

    PS ~ Reminds me of a women working in a shop here. I always used to tell her "oh, it's monday again" and she would always answer "oh no, thank God it's Monday" - lolol, she was waaaay too postive for me on Mondays!!


  • Dalaney gold member
    March 31, 2008
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    *hug* Lane

  • Rowan gold member
    March 31, 2008

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    I have typed, backspaced, typed, then backspaced again, typed: I can't think of a novel way to say how good this is. I absolutely loved this. I used to work graveyard at a motel the cops dibbed Hooker Alley. Nights were spent having alot of coffee with some of the live-ins. This took me back, and then again, forward. If that makes any sense. Thanks so much for sharing your Monday, it was probably more fulfilling for me as a reader, than for you, at the time. Big hugs.
    Love K.

    • NurseChilly gold member
      March 31, 2008
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      hehheheh - i'm so glad it's not just me then, that does that with comments..

      i feel such a nerd at times, trying to think of something grand to say..

      I love you lady


  • Night Hope gold member
    March 31, 2008

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    "We all have ideals
    and become lost in penitence;
    I have crawled out of the snake-pit
    once or twice myself
    and seen the river run."

    This stanza alone holds an entire lifetime, a complete world within these lines, my Friend. Piercing, poignant & profound, Sweetie. Good luck in the contest. Wanda


    • NurseChilly gold member
      March 31, 2008
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      thank you my friend... I know you've carried it long and hard too luv, ..... we'll help each other hold on

  • Suzanne Dia
    March 31, 2008

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    Should probably turn the radio off..
    I do regularly throughout the day as Bill likes to listen to NPR all day.

    I can only take so much.

    It is all rather depressing after a while.

    But, this is just one night, and you'll be done soon enough, and the nights will feel less lonely again.



    • NurseChilly gold member
      March 31, 2008
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      it's weird how one's mind ticks over in the wee small hours....

      it's all the and mad talk... the music channel is pretty good on this station, it just interupts every hour with the crap news.....

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