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Vapour

Living unborn yesterdays
A borrowed smile from tomorrow
A stone trying to beat
A shadow trying to laugh
Blood brothers with sorrow
Another chain I hold


Stale breath
Stale heart
Stale footsteps
Walking ghost

A contest entry

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  • PerfectImperfection
    June 25

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    Straight forward depth and pained imagery of reverie. A mist from the eyes of apparition in yesterdays spiral. Nicely done!


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe silver member
    April 26
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    Excellent imagery...
    A pleasure to read.
    Many blessings
    ~A~


  • Cinnarry gold member
    April 1
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    Nicely written poem. The content matches the contest feeling. Well done.


  • AliceinPoetryLand Moderators member
    April 1
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    Welcome to Allpoetry

    Nicely penned. Very succinct and your word usage works really well in this.
    All the best in the contest
    If you need any help hereat AP please don't hesitate to contact myself or any other online Greeter. We are always willing to help
    Gaylene


    • tainfinite
      April 1
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      taiinfinite

      thankyou for your welcome to allpoetry and your comments on this poem.
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