Dear child
unfurl your fingers from my apron strings
and allow yourself to breathe
through a different kind of strength
and I'll stand far enough away ~
to reach you still...
A contest entry
- dear......., by Nicolette.
1100 points, ended April 14, 2008, 43 entries
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Beautiful
This drags some beautiful memories from me and I loved them all. Thank you for such a wonderful write.
Terry
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This sums up motherhood, perfectly. The last line is touching, and so beautifully poignant. Enjoyed!
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Sometimes is it hard to let go even when you know they are grown and have to fly on their own. We teach them to have faith in themselves, and then we have to practice it!
This is a very sweet poem full of wisdom. ~ K
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This reminds me of an old Chinese saying:
"it's a wise mother who knows when to let her children go" - and that takes some courage - and sometimes a little pushing too.
I liked this - it spoke to the mother in me! Thank you for a lovely entry.
~ Nicolette
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though i've never had children, i once wrote a childrens' song with a theme very much like your write
this is touching and lovely
thank you for entering
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This is simply beautiful. How on earth do you do it? I actually got pinpricks from this little piece.
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This is exactly what a mother does! What mind sure did.. let me find my own strength, but always there within arms reach for love and support!
Great write!
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This is beautiul and well said. Time for the child to fly and become strong. Good take on the contes.
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focused sweet sides
hello calm mentioner
this does have the gist of the tug that covers your schedule as theirs, until other nourishing can't be forgotten and readiness might coincide. as delicately quantified "through a different kind of strength" not substituting either.
I do wonder technically if the judges will look at apron strings as an item phrase, to discount the adjective usage when different is then seen. however aside from that, 'enough' adds in. so you might be tenderly welcomed to editing like I was. though yours is smoother, may be easier to rework than mine was.
hard to separate from ideas often even lol,
babies are my subject
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