I am a child
But a woman is what you may see
I have no fears
I only have dreams
I don’t really care about the sunshine
So I’ll throw some rocks into the stream
I fell into your arms and looked into your eyes
And I found a child like me living still inside
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reminds me of us
eh,babe
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well it may just be...
by ap father (Sol-Dad X) wanted me to write something more happy so i wrote down my feelings about my life with you in it down on this poem, i know its short but this is what it is.
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Excellent!
This is great! Very few words for how much it invites questions. Your poem has me very intrigued!
It makes me wont to know about the 'dreams', the 'stream' and whose 'eyes'? Your father's?
All this from a few lines is excellent writing, I think. I love the last verse as the ending! First and last verses stand very strong and complete and 2nd and 3rd are wide open like the introduction to a much larger story.
Very well done, I really love reading this and I feel so honoured that you wrote it for me to enjoy. Thank you so much.
You know, It would make me very happy to be your AP Father, if you'd still like?
Either way, I will also be very happy to read more of your poetry, especially if it expands on the feelings and memories you have captured here, because I want to know more about where this comes from. It makes me want to learn more about you.
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hi.
i am so grateful that you want to be my Ap father that would mean alot to me ... dad
wellim glad that u enjoy me words i enjoy yours as well thanks for caring. luv ya.
your daughter ~benji nichole~ shhh thats my real name!
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This was really really good. I am really amazed at how great you created an image with your words.
This was just so great.. I loved it..
Peace to you, Jetleena
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