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Monolithic Neolithic Mystery

Stones of old, standing in circle.

Ancient wonder of mystery.

Atmospheric, peaceful, retreat.

Avebury Henge and village, Wiltshire.

 

 

Hallowed rocks,

how solid their pride,

part of an enigma,

a sacred complex.

 

 

Nearby the mound, Silbury Hill.

West Kennet's neolithic barrow.

Then on to the Sanctuary.

Avebury Henge and village, Wiltshire.

 

 

Spiritual home to

Moonraker Pagan kin.

Magic surrounds

Psychic phenomena

 

Sunrise, Solstice or waning moon.

Beltane, Samhain, holy Sabbat.

Honoured by stones in a circle.

Avebury Henge and village, Wiltshire.

 

Witches, Druids,

Pagans all, ritual

Goddess peace always,

Blessed Be.

Author notes

Option C: write 6 quatrains (4 line stanzas)

3 of the quatrain should have a refrain line 8 syllables per line (short line)

and the other 3 quatrains should be either much shorter or much longer and have no syllable count (free verse) .

 

Inspiration Avebury Henge, Wiltshire, UK

 

The Story of the Wiltshire Moonrakers

Many years ago, when smuggling was rife, some Wiltshire men were bringing home kegs of illegal brandy by moonlight. Crossing a bridge the donkey drawing the cart bolted and the barrels fell into the stream below.

While the yokels were trying to rescue the barrels with some hay rakes they found nearby, an excise officer rode up and started asking questions. The quick thinking yokels explained that they were raking for the cheese they could see in the water. The "ziseman", taken in by the story rode off thinking the stupid yokels were raking at the shadow of the moon. The floating barrels were soon retrieved and the title "Moonraker" has been linked to Wiltshire folk ever since.

 

My paintings of Avebury

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  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    April 22, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry

    I have already given you a critical feedback in your assignment submission, so here I will focus on the story told . Your poem is focused on stone henge, yet your author notes explain the moonraker reference. I was a bit confused for a second, but I caught up quickly I have heard tell that stone henge was something left by alien lol. I like this idea by far better. I hadn't realized that this place was associated with pagans and witches. Very informative and interesting.

    I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

    God Bless
    Tammy


    • Corvus Corone
      April 22, 2008
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      Tammy, Thank you, Stonehenge and Avebury are two different places. Stonehenge is the famous one everyone has heard of and gets over visited. Avebury is several miles away from Stonehenge, less famous and so more popular with the Druids, pagans, wicca and all. They come from a similar era, both being prehistroy. The stones at Stonehenge are much bigger, whilst Avebury is much larger in area, both are awe inspiring. The purpose of them, no one knows, how they got there, no one knows. Are they temples, market places, or signals to alien life, I don't know. I do know at Avebury and to a lesser extent at Stonehenge I get an amazing sense of oneness with the Earth and the powers that may be so for me they are spiritual.


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    April 8, 2008

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    well done, good lesson!

    It's starting to all make sense, we just need to practice
    using the structures as we do our imagery, pics, and music to heighten our poems.
    I'm starting to visualize this, thanks to your poem!
    Thanks for a great lesson!
    ears/Seattle

    • Corvus Corone
      April 8, 2008
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      wow thank you. I am learning myself. As with all new things I fall back on the things that I love, such as Avebury.


  • The Poetic Angel
    April 1, 2008

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    this is butiful Jems m'Lady

    i love the refrain of where it is and the ending is just perfik to a wonderful poem...

    the story in the Author notes is awsome i love that

    xxx Your angel xxx

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