I went down under your long skirt
Pickup something which fell under your feet
Ended in turning up my face and see
passion engulfed between your legs
You succumbed to my face
We made love on your skirt as sheets.
At some unknown moment,
I found what had fallen in the beginning.
But I didn’t care to look
What it is, instead kissed your body
at some unknown place.
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Comments
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Romantic interlude...the skirt for a sheet...what a passionate thought! Thanks for the entry and best of luck!!!!!
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I chuckled more than anything. I hope you don't mind.
I'm not so sure that "bend down under your long skirt" works very well visually here. Bend and short skirt might though.
Also, I think in your third line you should try saw instead of "see".
Thanks for entering.
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thanks for the visual and I love that long skirt and i need it as sheet later
I made more comfortable by going under rather than bending ...
I dont mind you chuckled, third line cannot change since I start with ended up,
thank you
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