When you are
Sun behind mountain
hides your cleaves and valleys
Unknown shades silhouette your tan
You take all this as an excuse
Mix your body in my soul.
And I don’t see you
But Your nakedness
Accepting my cosmic desire
So please
Dress up with your defects
And your secrets.
Hold Your shape ancient mirrors
Pause and hire a fan
However
Whatever
I can see it nakedly
I love you all the same
A contest entry
- Naked by Tangled Angle.
300 points, ended March 31, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Erotic Musings of the Mind by SchizoChic.
600 points, ended April 16, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
may be not so good but I just put being nude and being in love together
Comments
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Beautifully written, very heartfelt...
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Beauty in meterphor...
"Unknown shades silhouette your tan
You take all this as an excuse
Mix your body in my soul."
This is wonderful, though the whole write is well done...
Creative and lovely take on "naked"...
Best,
mystic
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I like it. Best of luck.
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I liked the imagery here, i think the ending could be stronger; but even so, well done.
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naked thanks
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great title!
my favorite parts are the stanza:
"Sun behind mountain
hides your cleaves and valleys
Unknown shades silhouette your tan"
and the line: "Mix your body in my soul."
i love it! -
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thanks for reading and your comments
its gives that drive to write....
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