*Ten of Swords*
She folds her wishes inside the red
pigment of Autumn leaves and lets
them fall into the carnivorous wind like a
muffled prayer.
Gracing the edge of sanity,
she admires their descent and
wonders at the sudden possibility of
escape.
*The Chariot*
He takes my hand, and
together we decide to spread
the epidemic of unmarked skin.
He says salvation does not lie below us,
blooming from the cracks in concrete,
but rather it is centered in
the lightness of words.
Author notes
The ten of swords represents absolute destruction, being pinned down by a multitude of things or situations. The person lying on the ground, defeated and bleeding, may also represent a feeling of hopelessness and being trapped by emotions or mental anguish, since swords represent strife and the mind.
On its most basic level, the chariot card implies war, a struggle, and an eventual, hard-won victory. Either over enemies, obstacles, nature, or the beasts inside you.
march 31, 2008 and april 2, 2008
the difference in point of view between the two poems is intentional...
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Very nice.
I liked reading it, it was very enjoyable.
Thanks for entering my contest =] -
i love when you write about tarot..
you are the goddess of words. and all of mine have just disappeared. this was downright amazing. i wish i had something better to say to you, you deserve it.
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Wow. Lovely titles and symbols, I love how you've applied the card motif, plus the imagery which is stunning. You take your own emotions and make a cliche theme into something so personal and deep. I do hope things will turn out good for you and I wonder what this is about, as I may misunderstand. I believe the change in perspective might be because you want to be closer to the second poem than the first... may be very wrong again. But I really like these. Thanks for taking up the challenge.
~Diana
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thanks so much for the honor of gold!
you are partially right about the change in perspective; i want to relate more to the person in the second poem and the feeling of being saved.
thanks so much!
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This is a stunningly beautiful take on the prompt of the ten of swords... it was breath-taking - I think that this poem has been elevated to the status of my most favorite from you! The only thing that I picked up was that maybe you meant 'descent' instead of 'decent'? You have such a way with imagery - when I'm not loving you for it, I'm jealous as!
Remember, even though the ten of swords represents everything that you mention, it has always been a card of hidden hope - darkness can never last while the sun has his influence
Keep writing
Polly
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thanks so much for the comment! i fixed that spelling mistake
your comments always make my day
for the sake of the contest, i am writing a response poem to this
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Brief but completely brilliant. Of particular note is the first stanza, you write in an obscure way that somehow creates such colourful and delicate images in my mind.
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