I stare deep into your beautiful pale blue lit eyes,
Where I can see the love we share elegantly entwined,
I embrace you gently pulling you nearer to my heart,
Hugging you softly, I've loved you from the start,
My lips find yours as we express how we feel,
Loving you makes my world seem ever so real,
I wish this moment could just last forever,
Kissing you being my one and only pleasure,
All I ever want is you in my arms,
I'm falling victim to every single one of your charms,
I love you so much, more than the life that I live,
And my beating heart to you I forever give.
A contest entry
- Feelings, Feelings, Feelings..... by MartaJay.
350 points, ended April 10, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i am so lost for words that is so beautiful love it well written
keep it up you have a natural talent for this
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WOW......I DONT KNOW WHAT TO SAY ITS AMAIZING DAVID........WOW GREAT JOB KEEP UP THE AMAIZING RANDOM LOVE POEMS
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this poem is so beautiful!! ITS GREAT...i'm speechless
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Amazing
I think this is one of my favorites of yours. No matter that it's a love poem, I think it's really great. Great job!
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This is so beautiful.
It's a great poem ♥
Rachel
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wow! this is a beautiful poem! very well written and i can feel ur love her her... i agree with Bleedingdemon by the way!
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This is really intense. I wish someting like this would happen to me.
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this is an amazing write.
ur very talented, ive read some of your others to.
very nice
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awww i remember feeling like this....too bad he took my gift, my heart, and threw it away.
happy 4 u though and best of luck keeping ur lover ^_^
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This is so beautiful! it makes me cry. well done. this girl is very lucky to have you, i love how you express your feelings in you'r poetry. i absoulutely adore this poem i think it is worthy of a better title.
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aaaaaawwww!! lol...ive never "seen" you act so lovey dovey before. lol..
is this for Sam?? aaawww
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Wow. Thaat's amazing...
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i love this
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very cute.
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OMG I TOTALLY LUV DIS POEM IF I COULD XPRESS MY FEELINGS 4 MY X-BF DIS IS WATS I WOULD OF SAID I LUV HIM SO MUCH TO BAD I HAVE NO CLUE WERE HE IS STOOPID RIGHT I KNO
LOL!!!!!!!!!!!!HAN HAN HAN HAN HAN !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ADVENTURE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I have read it at least a zillion times and decided to comment just now.
This....is...beautiful. I cried wheni read it, its so beautiful! I know, I'm a freak, but this is amazingly beautifully wonderful! Here, have some clappies.
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I like it!
I have no smiley buttons left though so...
I can't rate it
*Cry*
I sorry!
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I agree.
I have no smileys left, but this is realllllyyyy good.
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OMGOMGO...M/....G
IDK IF I READ THIS BUT WOOOW ,LOL
-CHRISTY
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Dave that was simply gorgeous.
Line one ha one mistake you have an 'L' on the end of blue.
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awe, this is so beautiful ^.^ it's very sweet and heart-warming this is an awesome write keep it up
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aww this is cute davey. and she is lucky to have you in her life im glad to have you as a twin brother who loves to write poetry - Sami
P.S your still a dork
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i loved it !!
this is such a beatiful poem !!
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that was pretty
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Feeling The Love
I am feeling the love in this write. I see the person with hazel eyes your in your arms wraped around her, falling in love wanting to give her everything not wanting nothing in return except her exceptance and love. Great Great write
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that was a awesome poem kinda how I feel about my boyfriend and I lol
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hey i know i have read this before but i cant stop reading it lol and Jody is with me and yea she says that she gonna make fun of u the next time she talks to you so hahha!!! -ashley
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WoW this is really beautiful and heartfelt....i love how you put so much thought into it
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awwwww
this poem is very good and it shows that u care bout somebody....deeply?
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holy shoot!
this is like really cute andd amazing.
like on the reals david.
yr an amazing writer kiddo; :]
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Awsome
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awwwwwwwwwwww
soooooooo cute!!!!!!!!! i luved all of it!!my fave part, if u must ask, is
the 3 & 4 lines.... sooo sweet.
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Amazing poem i love it good job
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wow this took my breath away
its so beautiful
it almost made me cry
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This is completely amazing ^^ it is a very in depth love poem. it made me feel your emotion ^^
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OOOOOOOOOO!i love it!well since everyone already said wat i would also write in this comment and no sense in copying them.so all the comments below...I AGREE!cause i like it![u can tell me "ty for ur comment" now.hehe]
leslie
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ty for ur comment
lol
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awwww yw.hehe
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I think whoever you wrote this about is truely lucky.
Amazing write.
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wow
bro this is so amazing i love it so much...i mean this works in so many ways with my bf and i.....wow you're amazing i love ya big bro -
This is really good I like it alot.
Sarah
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oh wow. this was amazing. Every word a great way to express how you feel about her. Very Good ^^
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amazing. it had me engrossed straight through to the end.
great write.
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wow. tht was amzing i added u as one of my favs so.. yea,but wow, a perfect way to put it
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Beautiful!
This was absolutely beautiful and amazing....I loved this piece! Me and my best friend Mishay can REALLY relate to this....I love the emotion put into this poem...Keep up your beautiful work!!
~Kayla~
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Wonderful write. It was lovely. Full of love. =) I hope to read more from you. I hope you continue writing excellent poetry.
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awesome
I like your poem
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OMG!!!!
I added you as one of my favs so please add me!!!
This sounds just like the way I feel about my man Josh. He has hazel eyes and I never want 2 let him go!!!
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thxs for ur comment and ta for the add
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I totally agree with " A Faded Memory".. this poem is amazing.. and whoever it's written for is the luckiest person on this entire planet..This poem is just beautiful.
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This poem is sweet. I wish a boy would write a poem like this about me but no one likes me. No one ever will. Great write.
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excellent
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wow this is really
good and beautiful poem
you did a great job on it
and i loved it great work
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I love this one, its beautiful, whoever its for is lucky! *claps*
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I have hazel eyes. But great poem. Its really beautiful, i love it. keep up the great work.
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yay! i love it.
i loved mostly "My lips find yours as we express how we feel,
Loving you makes my world seem ever so real,"
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"I love you so much, more than the life that I live,
And my beating heart to you I forever give."
keep up the good stuff!
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Wow that is really good it is so sweet well done =] x
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oh my god!wow i love it if a guy did this for me i would die! -ashley (deadwithin)
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Wow, great poem!
I can't explain how this made me feel because it's just so perfect in so many ways.
The words glided off the page so nicely, and I love it.
"I embrace you gently pulling you nearer to my heart,
Hugging you softly, I've loved you from the start,
My lips find yours as we express how we feel,
Loving you makes my world seem ever so real,"
I love that part because it's so descriptive.
I don't find this write cliche at all, because it seems real - it seems like I've felt exactly what you've described. Probably because I have
lol
You did an amazing job with this.
It seriously rocked. <3
sincerely,
dovey~
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OMG! this was wonderful! one of the best love poems i've read in a long long time! its a very lovely one i have to say... and your metaphors left me breathless! >.< Great job! LOVED IT! keep writing!
~RANJI
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ty for ur comment
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wooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo! I loved it... I kinda need some inspiration based on lovy dovy stuff so it kinda gave me an idea yay!
great write and another thing by what I read in your profile i kinda like you... your drawings are amazing... that rose is hot... anywyas windering if you wanna be in my Ap fam?
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thxs for ur comment and sure
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woow
wow hey lost emo its me shelby aka lilac (real name is lilac) that is such a good poem. you need to write more like that. that made me want to cry. hey talk to me k. i still hyper!!!
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thxs for ur comment
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That is sweet!!!!
I like the rhyming...it's really good.
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ty ^.^
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so so so beautiful even the second time it leaves me brethless wishing to fall into my boys arms. im not even going to try to move right now. .
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amazing
that was so beutiful. there were many feelings. just beutiful!! -
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cheers
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this poem is so enthralling- i just loved how you peiced it together, and made it seem like a romantic story- you could see things happening, and feel the warmth of this whole write~ it actually made me feel fuzzy on the inside for a second there....lol ^.^ i give you many clappy hands!
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i loved it !!!!!
i love this poem it is definetly 1 of my favorites i love the way u captured the love in that poem -
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hey this is a really good poem... so sweet.
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see u r beautiful ^.^
and ta for the comment
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thats really good
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This gives me chills, sooo beautiful....
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omg this is incredable it deservee to win hands down you really know how to write great stuff keep it up
btw this poem deserves about a million applauses
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lol ty very much ^.^
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omg
that was so good
very imagery
i like this so much how id this peom about?
thank you for sharing this poem with me
keep up the great work
kitty23
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thxs
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that is really good. i would aplaude it but i have none.
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lol thxs ^.^
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very good
i like it it is very emotional i love your imagrey..."love we share elegantly entwined" .. i love this line it just speaks to me... so vey good... ^.^
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awwwwwwwwwwwwwwww
this is soo cute
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lol ty
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wow, beautiful!
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