When he is with her
His eyes become Tiffany lamps, shining with the soft, luminous gold of
Her reflection;
His words whisper messages from the gods;
Each sylable an angel wing's beat; each word a poem, each unspoken thought a novel,
An epic of Love's eternal story;
His lips offer prayers to her temples, her palms, her breasts,
Seeking to press deeper, longer, into their matched mate;
His fingertips become satin and silk, adorning his Venus with
Robes of glory, carressing the nape of her neck, the curve of her shoulder,
The arch of her back.
When he is with her dreams come true, myths burst to life, and the universe smiles.
A contest entry
- Skin by Mari Goes.
700 points, ended April 9, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Do you think it's just words, or possibilities?
Comments
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ah, that was so very nice .... mmmmmm
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This has such a romantic feel, more than romantic it shows how much a woman can be adored by a man.
Tiffany lamps eyes, I like that imagery, quite unique! I used to have one made of small coloured pieces of glasses.
Thanks for this very pleasant entry
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"Each syllable an angel wing's beat; each word a poem, each unspoken thought a novel,
An epic of Love's eternal story;"
This is beautiful & I agree with Nic, it does have a classical feel to it. This poem makes me sigh...I love it, thanks so much for entering.
(check your spelling of 'syllable' in your poem)
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Thanks. It wasn't just for a contest, it was from one heart to another. She is the classic.
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You've created so many lovely visuals here to enjoy. I liked the sense of "respect" almost that seems to rise from your words, almost a classical feel to this poem.
To see ourselves reflected in the eyes of our loved one is indeed the highest blessing, the best-written poem. Lovely work - I so enjoyed this one.
Thank you for your entry.
~ Nicolette
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Pegasus, you had me with "tiffany lamps."
I'm seeing it! Reflective eyes, a mystical
concept in this sensuous piece.
You truly created a mood
matching the "skin" concpet.
Aesthete
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lots of good imagery here
good luck in the contest -
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Thanks for the comments. First contest entry -- encouragement is nice!
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