Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

A Bums Delight

departing train
at the crowded station
un-smoked cigarette

In a list

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments


  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    2 days ago
    ?
    Edit | Reply

    Well

    this certainly had a good aha moment! I had to put the title together with line 3 & than I got it! Good one friend. Bums delight... You are somethin' else.


  • DogFish silver member
    April 19
    Edit | Reply
    ...oh! heaven on earth!


  • Pollycheck
    March 31, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Thank you for entering my haiku contest.

    departing train
    at crowded station
    un-smoked cigarette

    This is a very interesting haiku. I wonder if it would read better if it had and article in line two?

    at the crowded station