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Some day

Is this the life you asked for?
A pre-ordered date
set for the past?

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  • maa gold member
    April 2, 2008

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    what a striking response to the prompt !
    in very few, but well chosen words, you act like a zen-master, bringing back the dreaming disciple to the present moment ... you guide us to the spaceless space of timelessness, reminding us not to cling to what we might believe is "real" - but dwells in the haze of impermanence ... you teach us that "enlightenment" is not an event hopefully happening in the future ... but our true nature, already present and accessible here and now ...

    I cannot see your name, but see your age on the right : this verse might have sprung from a 15 years old body - but the soul attached to it, shows me timeless wisdom ...

    thank you,
    maa


  • notorious gold member
    April 1, 2008
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    Hmm--I think the first line could be rephrased to "Is this the life you expected?" or "Is this the life you wanted?" or even "Do you call this your/a life?" I just think one of those sound...more snazzy.

    "A pre-ordered date
    set for the past?"

    Interesting--is someone planning their death??

    *Someday is one word =)