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Moon flower

 

 

Faith rises beneath my feet
to stand at the side of an angel,
for I am old enough to know
that neither life nor love is a dream,

that thirst comes by absence
and wants drift upon moon light;

young enough to find my heart in tender hands
and she is a yellow flower,
touched by breath of winds;

and I went to her, to opened hand
put my kiss into waiting palm
with my eyes, asked her to stay.

Her gaze, calm wide eyes, made of night and sadness
raised pieces of my soul to my skin
and I waited

for the turning of a tide
for the pull of silvered skies
a whisper upon my eyes;

and wait there ...still.

 

 

 

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  • Very soft and delicate, indeed, this poem is. Any poem with "Moon flower" as its title is bound to be magnificent, especially coming from you. This piece radiates warmth and sincere emotion.

  • This gentle, beautiful love story actually brought tears to my eyes. You are old enough to appreciate, and young enough to treasure, the gift of love. The tender imagery of placing a kiss in her palm was so lovely. It is a pleasure to read the words of a gentleman who is comfortable with romance. Thank you for sharing this with all of us. Liz


  • Your quiet wisdom shines through, as does your tenderness, proclivity for chivalrous romance, and patience. Really quite breathtaking, especially by the light of the moon.

    I love these lines:
    and I went to her, to opened hand
    put my kiss into waiting palm
    with my eyes, asked her to stay.--sigh

    And these:
    Her gaze, calm wide eyes, made of night and sadness
    raised pieces of my soul to my skin--overwhelming sigh, ah, to touch another soul.

    So amazingly done. May you have a beautiful wait.


    • Peteskid gold member
      March 31
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      Thank you Ten-
      for your wonderful comments, so gratifying...PK

  • MariGoes gold member
    March 31

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    This poem has that feeling of asking for love, love that you have waited to happen and won't let go that easily.
    the kiss in the opened palm...that has imagery is inspiring, because it's simply lovely.
    beautiful poem, tender like a caress.

    Mari


    • Peteskid gold member
      March 31
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      Thank you Mari-
      for your kind and welcome words...PK

  • ardentMarch gold member
    March 31

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    came back to bookmark for inspiration...


  • JustBreathe gold member
    March 31

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    "I am old enough to know
    that neither life nor love is a dream,

    that thirst comes by absence
    and wants drift upon moon light;

    young enough to find my heart in tender hands"

    Beautiful verses. Love the feel. Touches the spirit.


    • Peteskid gold member
      March 31
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      thank you JB-
      for your kind and thoughtful comments,agree it speaks to some life lessons and the spirit...'skid

  • ardentMarch gold member
    March 31
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    "Her gaze, calm wide eyes, made of night and sadness
    raised pieces of my soul to my skin
    and I waited"

    I love this....filled with longing & beautiful, sensual imagery...*sigh* ..a gorgeous poem..


  • secberm
    March 31
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    As always, well penned, brother. Write on. One.

    Dez


  • Rowan gold member
    March 31
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    Oh such love and longing in this. Beautiful lament, my friend.


    • Peteskid gold member
      March 31
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      Thank you Rowan-
      always wonderful to hear from you, my friend...PK
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