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Hardly Breathe

Endless Love
 
 
Call me smitten, call me whatever
I can hardly breathe
When we're together
I try to form the words to say how I feel
But I can't find the letters to formulate words
You've taken them right out of my mouth
 
Sometimes at night
I lay in bed and cry
I never thought I'd have it so good
I thank God in prayer, that He really did care
When He answered my cry,
the day that you came into my life
It only gets better from here
 
Endless love
It's you and me
 When I see that twinkle in your eye
I know you're happy
 
This love is endless
When you're around
I can hardly breathe
 

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  • Robbwindow
    May 19, 2008
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    Breath is important

    Thanks very refreshing, well done.


  • Amorita Maharaj
    April 25, 2008
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    Sweet :)

    what a sweet and lovely poem


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    April 7, 2008
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    I like writing love poems b/c I can't stand it when people try to convey love as sex. It's soooo much more than that. So I try to convey it in a completely different light.


  • Lyrical Rain
    April 7, 2008

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    Being in love is a happy thing and it is rare for someone to ever even find this type of love in this lifetime. So i loved this poem because it is actually a love poem that is most sensual and beautiful.


  • Blooming Poet
    April 7, 2008
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    This is what I am looking for and this poem for sure will be considered for an award


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    April 5, 2008

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    Wow, very beautiful and heartfelt
    my friend! Great work putting
    this one together here. All the
    best to you in this contst and
    thanks a lot for sharing it here!




    Jeremy0826


  • grannyeri gold member
    April 2, 2008

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    Think we can remember those days when we felt like this - a kiss took one's breath away and it sure was tough finding it again. Easy to read and understand these sentiments written in this poem.


  • raggyann
    April 1, 2008

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    oh love does make people smile and happy andd fullfiled
    this is a beautiful poem
    filled with love and gratitude


  • P. W. Blackwell
    March 31, 2008

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    wow this poem is really powerful and i like it a lot you have such a way with words and i love that keep up the great work
    tori


  • Rain-Shot-Rose
    March 31, 2008

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    Yes

    "This love is endless
    When you're around
    I can hardly breathe."

    I know what that feels like that's for sure. Your piece was very honest and full of beauty. I thank you for writing it so that I was able to read it Well done...well done.


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    March 31, 2008

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    Lowercase Prelude

    Ahhh very sweet write. This is wonderful. keep up the excellent penning Dear Redwing

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