I've trashed the cross
laden upon my heart
a solid stone
made of pristine
emerald
slammed down
upon the diamond table
of reality
my religion
upon the dust
of this mangled
cross
something of the
past;
something that has
been
torn away
from my unwrinkled
hands
so young ~
I had been
when he left me
Author notes
Prompt:
Something that was trashed and you want it back
Religion. Perhaps I want it back; just not in the same way.
In a list
A contest entry
- Waaah! I Want It Back!!!! by intanglio2ring.
800 points, ended April 17, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be honest here.
Comments
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wow. this was very well written. a scene portrayed so well.
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There are many things about religion that cause us to ponder the relevance & I get tangled up in them too!
This one made me think
Thanks for your entry
Tang
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Hi Perception!
Thanks for commenting on 'Summer' I thought I would return the favour to you :-)
I really liked the emotion in this poem and the clever wording. 'slammed down
upon the diamond table
of reality' is awesome. Keep writing!
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I really like the first two lines of the last stanza, they were simple, but held a lot of impact. And overall, the imagery was really well done! Nice adjectives =D
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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wow..such powerful imagery!
i did feel like i was in the heart of the poem,
watching all of this happen. i really like this, beautifully written.
keep up the great writing!!
and good luck in that contest, btw.
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Intriguing - definitely a powerful metaphor and great imagery - I see what you have done here, and appreciate the way in which it was done!
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