I meet you in a dark risky disco
Our eyes lock, hands do a frisko
We whisper low, come on let's go?
Let's bonk-bonk-bonk all night
I strip you down to the nuddy-nuddy
You strip me down to the nuddy-nuddy
Hold me close as we make all lovey-dovey
As we bonk-bonk-bonk all night
Door to the bed, we go pouncy-pouncy
Love your body, let's go bouncy-bouncy
Nothing like horizontal dancey-dancey
Let's bonk-bonk-bonk all night
Tingle you right down to your fluffy-muffy
Passion rises as we get all huffy-puffy
God let's hope you're not up the duffy-duffy
After we've bonk-bonk-bonked all night
Hands want to wander, go for a mosey-mosey
Love your skin right down to your tosey-wosies
Wrap you around as we get all cosy-cosy
Let's bonk-bonk-bonk all night
Feeling exhausted want to go nigh-nigh?
Look at it grow bigger oh my-my
One more time before we go bye-bye
Let's bonk-bonk-bonk all night
Author notes
Written December 7th, 2003
A contest entry
- Sexual seduction (pics) by joleahe.
300 points, ended April 2, 2008, 23 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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You are definitely NOT WELL!!! LOL And I pity the wife if this is the kind of pick up lines you used on her LMAO....Love, C
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This is hilarious!!! Even trying to imagine this scene has me rolling on the floor! Too funny! Congrats. on th Gold too!!
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ok I usually dont comment on peoples poems till i judge...but this was so hilarious...I loved it! great job
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Haha. I just love the line; "
God let's hope you're not up the duffy-duffy"
So say this is in the 'erotic' category I found it very amusing and fun to read, with amusing rhymes. A very fun read. Good.
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hahahaha.funny.now i can't erase the bonky-bonk in my head,no matter how hard i try.hehehe.enjoyable read.
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this is a well written creative piece about the "meat" market scene out on the town
The flow is good and the rhyme is very solid. very cleverly done i enjoyed the read
love and light
Blaze -
Ah. David, I needed a bit of a smile ..
Thanks. Bonky bonky? Lol.
Every once in a while, Ed Peterson will say "See ya later, Disco" .. Disco is such a good word .. but frisko? Only DRP could get away with that one.
Good luck in the contesto? Thanks for swinging in for a read .. always much appreciated.
Lisa
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A witty ditty in something you don't usually find humor. Alliteration and assonance made for a delightful read. Good luck in contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long -
extremely funny
wow i bet you are fun to go to bed with...this has really cheared me up today, it is so amusing...i almost broke into song when reading it, it has a nice rhythm to it...well done, i shall give you my last applause...you deserve it lol -
LOL...cute piece with a feel good, sing-song rhythm....
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hahahaha, you made me laugh, you naughty boy, ... Well done...
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great!
Looooool,this was so funny
.Category erotica,huh?It's more close to humor,this poem is hilarious .I love it,I really do,you brought a huge smile on my face 
.Like RollingStone said,it's funny how lovers begin to talk in a silly way when they're caught by that fire,hehe.
"Look at it grow bigger oh my-my
One more time before we go bye-bye
Let's bonk-bonk-bonk all night"
oh my-my .
You're great,keep it going
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Congrats!
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OMG thats hilarious......i love it so much!!!
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hahaha! this is hilarious. I always find it amusing how some lovers break into baby talk when they get all lovey-dovey-dovey. it's like all the blood has been sucked out of their brains by the rush into their sexual organs.
Tingle you right down to your fluffy-muffy
Passion rises as we get all huffy-puffy
God let's hope you're not up the duffy-duffy
those lines are classic humor. they made me laugh out loud.
a good satirical poke at erotica. I enjoyed!
~travis
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haha this a very intertaining way to make some loving- good originality with the words- good luckk!
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INteresting poem with a different twist. Good luck in the contest. Rick
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Managed to make kiddie talk sexy.... nice sense of, uh, rhythm too. Reminds me of that flash thingy where the guy sings i just want bang bang bang, but you want bonk bonk bonk.
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wonderfully amusiing and good rhyming
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This is quite entertaining. I even laughed a little (no small feat, I assure you). Just one question comes to mind while reading the baby talk: How old was this girl? lol
Scott -
Oh David, you crack me up. I'm thinking I need a contest just for your silly stuff. Are you grinnin when you read this...I'm bettin you are lovin it! Sorry you got disqualified, but this ain't erotica, it is uhhhh, humor.... Luv it!! Cheryl
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Wow, it's great. This would make great lyrics as well. I love how you ended each line with the rhyming/repeat thing. It was absolutely wonderful to read!
~>Tu Leona<~ -
brill
ace
fantastic
great
anything else you want me to say??
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Hahaha this was brilliant. I loved how it was written, very laid back and..funny. Best of luck to you in the contest. Keep up the great work.
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Neat title and wonderful poem..this is a great poem..Thank you for entering and I wish you luck in the contest..
Much love
Bambie -
Well who in all the world could resist a poem with this title? Not me...so here I am
This was absolutely amazing, great rhymes and rhythm, I think this should be in the lyrics catagory as it has a wonderful sing song feel to it !!! Best of luck in the contest
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I don't know wheather to laugh or grab a lover. It is silly but it sounds like a lot of fun. I guess I will grab a lover and laugh with him and enjoy the night like you did. Very cute write, you took erotic to another level. very well done.
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oh yeah....here you go!
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HAHAHAHAHAHA! That was great! Very silly, but great!
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Outstanding flow
Oh man, your rhythm here wants me to go bonk bonk all night with my lovey dovey...It's true they should have a humour erotic one here because even though it is erotic, I lost the 'big' thing laughing, now I have to start all over again
Oh kids, all together now for a sing-a-long
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lol this was funny i like the rhyme scheme of the whole poem ... excellent ... a great write ... best of luck
Babie
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Rule number 8. No erotica. Gotta disqualify you sorry
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Hahaha. I could see someone pushing a buzzer everytime bonk was mentioned. This is the sheer joy of writing. Wicked
Peace
Chris -
Hilarious! I can't confess enough how much you can make me laugh. The humor flowed, no, it soared in this one. You continue to impress the heck out of me DP.
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Enjoyed this immensely
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i am bonk bonk bonkers about your poem! couldnt resisit reading this one and its great, hope your not up the duffy duffy. you sound english? its a great poem i love it. feel a tiny bit more like having sex now maybe after reading the other one that put me off. going to try to find sensitive man as the antidote!thanks for the read this was brill
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heh he hehe
he he he heh he..ha ha ha...te tehehe he! This is what I sounded like reading this, in fact I'm STILL laughing! This is quite literally the cutest sex poem I have ever seen! It's so, so..JOVIAL! Are you british? Man this was hiarious, you just want to sing it aloud but that probably would have gotten me in some seious trouble, or at least get me some dirty looks. Very very funny!
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WOW! the rhythm with this is AWESOME. It could almost be a song!
megan -
awesome dude!
briliant! had to pause for breath in between lines! greatly comedic! well done! -
LoLoLoL This is cool as hell!! lmao They need a Erotic Humor Category! This would fit just perfect! This is a great write! Very well done!! ................Sheila
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Hahahaaaaaa... not sure this is too erotic, but certainly is hilarious!
Good luck
Kyla
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