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A Stolen Kiss



It happened in an instant
before I realized what I was doing.
My lips brushed against yours
for no longer than a second.
And then I pulled back.

I couldn't believe what I had done;
kissed you when Her back was turned.
I backed away, leaving you there
Slightly stunned and confused.
You wiped off your lips, guiltily.

She had turned around to my horror
and was staring at you very hard.
I bit my lip and watched you
tell her it was unexpected.
But we both knew that was a lie.

I couldn't bear to know
if you would have kissed back.
Had i stayed just a moment longer
I would have known the truth.
But I knew you didn't love me.

You were clearly in love,
but I couldn't help myself.
What i did, I do not regret,
even if you yourself did.
Which I highly doubt.


Author notes

Ah the reason for this. Well you see I am recently obsessed with my vampire RP and well this happened. So i decided to rewrite it in full sentences and leave out somethings too.

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  • funckymonkey
    May 24, 2008
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    omg this wuz a really sad but gud kinda poem!


  • Valley Girl silver member
    May 20, 2008

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    Interesting write. Sometimes it is good to write about personal issues. Now the reader is left wondering, what happened afterwards?


  • shopaholica
    April 1, 2008
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    I like your poem :) But the last line is kinda out of place... "which I highly doubt"


    • Nakatrea
      April 2, 2008

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      HOW is that out of place. What i did, I do not regret,even if you yourself did.Which I highly doubt.

      meaing i highly doubt that you regret what you did. god R.!!!!

      • shopaholica
        April 2, 2008

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        But it makes sense but it's just doesn't flow...
        It's like a rock in the middle of a road.. I dunno how to describe it.... :S


  • e m i l y
    March 31, 2008

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    Oh I started a whole line of stories
    to go with our Fairy RP.

    ahah I liked this poem because of the ending,
    no regret.
    I don't know why but it kind of makes me think
    what I would have done in this position.


  • Simply Simple
    March 30, 2008

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    Well my lovely twin. Here goes. this was amazing. However, I feel it was too short. I vote for making a series out of this one. I'd read it. or make this one longer. i want to know the ending!!! Great writing!!!

    Infinate clappys! etc.


    • Nakatrea
      March 30, 2008
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      i am trying to get the other guy who was part of "this" collaborate, thus making it longer.

      • Simply Simple
        March 30, 2008
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        ooooh. That would work! Interesting. Well whenever you figure it out let me know so I can read it again. Hehe. Good luck collaborating... I would kill someone...

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