A touch of cold in the Autumn night,
Meant that,
Unfortunately,
It was time for them to take flight.
They gathered up their blanket,
Gathered up their souls,
And tore themselves away
From the beauty they had just behold.
Author notes
Not sure if it is what you are looking for, but I gave it a try!
A contest entry
- 100 Short Prewrites by Kari.
450 points, ended March 31, 2008, 64 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Without the words by Envelope.
4200 points, ended April 3, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Don't worry i was looking for well written, thought onducing poetry, and you delivered. Short but touching, and i applaud anyway that can say so much in so little, also at the end "behold" should be "beheld"
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I wasn't sure whether to write "beheld" or "behold" and stick with the rhyme, I wanted "behold" to rhyme with "souls" which is why I left it!
Thank you anyway for the applause!!
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Wow, I really love the images in this piece...it's short and so very beautiful. Job well done here
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Beautifully simplistic
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This is beautiful!
I read it three times through to get a whole cute little story in my head. The imagery this piece created for me is amazing.
I especially love the last two lines, they end the poem really well. And the rhyme in this is fantastic! It really helps the flow and does not appear forced at all.
Well done, a beautiful piece, best of luck in the contest!
Arc-En-Ciel--x
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