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A Night Work

The mirror.
It is of the finest work.
It will be so useful to you darling as you rest.
I looked up and noticed my torch had
burned down to embers. I stopped and lit
another.  I am not quite finished yet.
Ignoring the pain from my bleeding hands
inside my gloves,
I started replacing the stones just so as
if never moved.
I knew you would love the
velvet and burgundy colors I picked out.
You always admired them, so damn the cost.
Nothing is to good for you dear.
No, my Love, I did not forget the pearls.
You never go anywhere without them.
Their beauty only grows as they caress
the milky white of your breasts.
Whats that dear? The mirror?
I know. Its a beauty. Inlaid with the
crystals and peaceful white doves.
I have to replace the Ivy now.
The last little deed before I take your
leave. Bid our love adieu.
Whats that? Yes, I am leaving.
There is a storm coming. You are
safe. Have faith. I made sure.
Now you are with your greatest love.
Just look in the mirror.
I took up the torches and started
to walk away.
What did you say my Love?
Oh yes, I mustn't forget the
shovel.
As I walked away I
thought the wind must be picking
up. I could have sworn I heard
a scream.

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  • Star Shine
    August 25, 2008
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    I love this kind of tale, this was always one of my favorite blood tinglers as a young girl when reading scary stories or scary cartoons. Meets all the title of the contest's requirements of creepiness! Could use a quick spell check. Thanks for the entry. Well done.


  • Cat10
    May 10, 2008

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    I'm sorry, but this piece doesn't have a HM on it, it was a nice write though, good luck in your other contest and also "What did so say my Love?" doesn't make much sense, you might need to change a word or something


  • Redrusty66
    April 22, 2008

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    Great write. Eerie lines brings across the imagery well. Nice construction and flow. Kept my attention and allowed for individual perspective. Enjoyed it greatly. Thanks for the read.


  • Wearychild
    April 10, 2008

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    Creepy! I like it! Thanks for entering I really liked how you put this together It was really great. Good Luck!


  • Dalaney gold member
    April 8, 2008
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    OOoohhh, you are going to really not like me but in the rules I stated no more than ten lines....(running for cover) You can edit or leave it...it's wonderful, and I hate to ask you to redo it, so if you can write another quickly before I finish judging, please do. Love, Lane


  • jamiedoring
    March 31, 2008
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    Nice and creepy. Loved it!


  • dustookie2
    March 31, 2008
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    WOW! awesome know you dont do dark that often but excellent take on the word bank...damn it you painted the images as the lines unfolded grabbed and held my attention...to the great ending...vanity she be woman.... Goluck in the contest...


  • raggyann
    March 30, 2008
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    hay
    you did this very well
    you also gave me some dark images


  • azlyn gold member
    March 30, 2008

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    I am certain I do understand this...I think I do! The last line is chilling. Perhaps a bit to do with vanity...amd other things as well!
    Best of luck...and no...you mustn't forget the shovel!!!!

    Az

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