Another sleepless night
full with dreams of
you
violent memories
silent ghosts walking
I hold the pillow tight
trying to convince me to
think
that I'm not broken
That my heart is still beating right
Loneliness haunts me
screaming taboos
at the corners of my rotten mind
Behind the mirror
there's nothing
but
a wall
Behind my smile
there's
just
my missing soul
Sharp pieces
of
broken reflections
cut me blind
I see no difference
between the ocean
and
the sky
They both just have the color of your eyes
Then
How am I supposed to forget you
and unwind?
Author notes
9.Blue eyes
Inspired in Twilight series by Stephanie Meyer...when Edward leaves Bella, I just relate to the way she felt then but not to what happened later...there's almost never a happy ending
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I am not the head judge however I really enjoyed your poem. It holds a lot of confusion which is hard, sometimes, to portray. Great write!
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I never read Twilight, but that poem is really good. The poeticness of this is just amazing.
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This is exactly how I felt when I first read the part where Edward left. And then I skimmed and speed-read to where he came back again!
Thanks for entering and good luck!
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I didn't even need to read your author notes, I knew exactly what the "theme" was, I instantly thought of Bella when Edward left....nice job I really enjoyed this....especially:
"I see no difference
between the ocean
and
the sky
They both just have the color of your eyes"
LOVED that part.....thanks for taking the time to enter -
Thanks for entering ^_^
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sad! Very well written though. Thank you for entering my contest.
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aww so sweet... loved it... but whats you option??
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'Sharp pieces
of
broken reflections
cut me blind'
my favy line right there, the cutteshing, very nice picture, very nicely put. this is good, but doesnt have enough pictures to create in my head. it is good tho. -
'Sharp pieces
of
broken reflections
cut me blind'
my favy line right there, the cutteshing, very nice picture, very nicely put. this is good, but doesnt have enough pictures to create in my head. it is good tho.
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You really took my ideas to heart. although you wrote this ahead of time, I really like this. The only thing I would comment on is the part where you say:
I see no difference
between the ocean
and
the sky
They both just have the color of your eyes
Edwards eyes are golden, not blue.
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very nice write. hit home for me.thank you for entering
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Very powerful. I felt the exact same way as Bella at this point in the story. You captured exactly how she felt, with amazing word choice. Best of luck in the contest!
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