Blood red lipstick
Colors her tainted pout
Caked on powder
Covers her scar ridden face
She lives to seduce men
With her whorish looks
Tempting and teasing
Her victims
She is just a:
Falsified beauty
Adorned with
Killer looks
Embracing men of all types
Author notes
Fake
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A contest entry
- Time for a detailed contest....no quickie here. All options, prompts and honest muse. by isisspirit.
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Falsified beauty
Adorned with
Killer looks
I absolutely LOVE those three lines together,
They read so brutal-
And so raw.
Wonderful Job<3
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A really interesting take you have on the prompt here. Your acrostic is well intergrated although the last line does seem a little bit forced, the one thing that annoys me about most acrostics.
The different line lengths you have included work extremely effectively, particularly in the second stanza. I also like "Falsified Beauty" Well written there, not cliche but direct and creative. I am still unsure about the "She is just a:" It seems like it is only there for the dumb audience if you know what I mean. You could get your point across just as clearly without it i think. This is well written. Thanks o much for your entry.
-Bec -
Awesome
Very well done and so very true. I dislike phony or fake people as it seems the world is full of them sometimes.
Good Luck in the contest. Sending my thoughts your way, Michele
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