I could say what I think
But I've wasted my words
Beautiful just doesn't cut it anymore
I need something better
And stronger to say
I could show you my heart
But I've no way to say
I love you seems so shallow
I want to speak
But lost my voice
I have used it all up
I have thrown it away
And now the words feel worthless
But what I feel
And all I know
You're everything I want
And all that I am
You're more than words can say
But still I say
You are something perfect
Author notes
bah-humbug
A contest entry
- ~ Word prompt~ by Frozentearz.
525 points, ended April 8, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Beautiful.
Thanks for entering. -
Yes, great twists and turns in this one leaving the reader knowing that the words won't come as the feelings are simply "indescribable" Thanks for entering and best wishes,
Frogz~ -
Ahhhh.. the twist and turns I have been looking for in this contest
indescribable which means too extraordinary for description: a scene of indescribable confusion; indescribable euphoria. I like how you went back and forth within this poem.
leaving the hint that emotions can be so indescribable In the last line to give it an end perhaps, something like so through it all I'm trying to say
You are something perfect! given it that final indescribable feeling.
Best of luck to you in the contest
Frozentearz -
saw different scans
these stanzas go nondescript unabashedly to behind the scenes simply almost...
one can seem to fall apart when it's ineffable, well for originality like "I could show you my heart
But I've no way to say" by self but common and beautiful vocabulary when expressed in an environment for joining~
it reminds me of a feeling I had about nature not needing anything fancy, wonderful as is by God's imagination per se. so your last reveals this isn't something you finish --
it turned a sigh beyond verbage,
babies are my subject
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