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Mask

There's a hidden feeling inside me
Its bottled up and it wants to be free
Tears well up in my eyes every night
From trying to make my life look alright
Though I am troubled I wear a bright grin
Shrouding the sadness I'm feeling within

How come they don't cry?
They all act so strong,
I hide behind this mask
To feel like I belong.

I want to be myself
Not hold everything inside
To step into the light
And never try to hide

But maybe they would judge me
If I dared to let them know
What I truly believe
Afraid to let it show

My old leather Bible
Rests by my bedside
Begs to be opened
It's not satisfied

During the week
It just gathers dust
When Sunday rolls around
My life, I'll adjust

I cry out to God
For two lives I seem to live
Though I keep failing him
He continues to forgive

Then its Monday-
Time to hide my fears
I'm filled with sadness
But I bottle up my tears

I put on the mask of a happy girl
But inside my life's just a whirl
Struggling to keep the happy face
Though I'm feeling like a disgrace

How can I lend a hand
To others in need?
I need that hand for myself
Struggling with the greed

I wish I could help others
Who are going through a hard time
But I feel like I’m the one
Facing the hardest climb

Tears begin pouring down
Like steady rushing streams
I rethink my values
Rethink my dreams

On Sunday I dream
Of being God's child
On Monday I hope
My life isn't too wild

Which dream do I want?
Which dream shall I choose?
I want to be God's child
What could I lose?

I begin to turn my life around
I know I was lost, but now I feel found
All I want to do is follow my king
Show his goodness to the world
Let his glory sing.

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  • Re-invention silver member
    May 16, 2008
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    we all hide under masks becausewe fear that showing the real us will affect not only those who judge without looking at them first, but wound ourselve even more.. i can realte with that feelin of being and having tow lives at best...
    great write love and good luck!


  • Spiritual Poet gold member
    May 14, 2008

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    awwwwwwwww

    How well you described the fight all Christians face. This is a nice piece and I am bookmarking it. I love it. God bless you, Mark


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    April 21, 2008

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    wow this is a powerful write it symoblises a lot with flow and rhyme it captures deep profound feelings well done


  • whatever666
    April 14, 2008

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    ooh ahhh

    wow this is amazing story with a poem you have a nice flow and your rhyme is unique thanks for entering.


  • nikkia
    April 12, 2008
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    this such a beautiful poem, so touching and inspirational. thanks for the entry and good luck.


  • nobodys-girl
    April 9, 2008

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    i love this! i enjoyed the happy ending and the message it sent. thankyou so muc for entering my contest and good luck!


  • ml12
    April 6, 2008
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    Great write! You portray your emotions well. On the 2nd line "its" should be "it's"


  • jbbrandi
    April 4, 2008
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    I really liked this one. Normally, I'm against the changes in patterns, but you've managed to pass it off very nicely! Well done and good luck in the contest!!
    (sry, but I'm VERY low on points and can't afford clappies right now...yeah...but I'll give them as soon as I can afford it! )


  • inseparable
    April 4, 2008

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    I can totally relate to this. I like the rhyming, it helps the poem flow along nicely. And the poem is kinda lengthy, yet it doesn't seem too long and dragged out. I like lines 27-30 and 55-58, they just seem so well-put together. Good luck in your contests!

  • LaurenLightning--x
    April 2, 2008

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    Beautiful and deep
    Ful of emotion, controlled well.
    I love the 2nd and 10th stanzas, they really blew me away.
    The rhymin in this is fantastic, it really helps with the flow of the piece.

    Well done! This is a brilliant poem you have written.

    Thank you for entering and goodluck!!

    Arc-En-Ciel--x


  • Lucky-Charm
    April 2, 2008
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    Awww,this touched me...I'm so glad I held this contest,so far I'm fitting in well with them. This one in particular.I'm at this point everyday.I think we all hide behind the mask and try to be 2 people at the same time. I truly love this!! Thank you so much for entering and goodluck.


  • StarIlluminated
    April 2, 2008

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    Oh wow, this is amazing! Such a great message and poem. I love the rhyming and how it made sense. Great work! Thanks for entering my contest and good luck!
    Illuminated *KT*

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