Oh so liberating,
The deserved aquisition
Of oh so desired knowledge
After waiting
So many months
Losing one game
After the other
Always ending
More confused than before...
Free from that prison
That chained my heart
To its cage for so long
...So why am I crying?
Author notes
^-^ FREEEEEE!!!! lol (just kidding)
I apoligize, this turned out very cliche.
What didya think?
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This is kinda cliche, but you did a good job kinda twisting it and making it original at the same time. The title is also cool, BIG WORDS!!! haha
But good poem it was really good!
*KT*
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Cliche can be nice sometimes...any ways, I think this was a particurally well written cliche. Nice metaphors and thoughts. Great job! Let me see...3 clappy men for you!!!
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nice one
great! it showed how the things we really want to know r often the same as the one we dread! Yay u!
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I don't think this is cliche.
Either way, I can really relate to this (of course >.>). Interesting that you put the game thing in there ^.^
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good job
Mer, unless you're entering something in a contest with special preferences to writing, here or elsewhere, don't be concious of how your poems turn out; cliche or otherwise. AP is not a competition. It's a community. A place where people express themselves their own way through their poems. Like everybody you express yourself in your own way and that's something to be proud of. Your poems are wonderful. They're unique and creative whether they evolve around a happy topic or a sad one. They're unique because they come from inside you. When poems come from the heart, they're always special. So love yourself for that, my friend. Be proud of what you can do. The best you can be. Thanks for sharing this write. I enjoyed it.
Brian
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